My verry First alteration

[Brainpower]

My first alteration. And remember the FIRST. So dont laugh pleas.

Pleas rate */10

http://img471.imageshack.us/img471/5936/firstaltever5ru.png

[Guy]

Amazing for a 1st alt!! 9/10 the lines COULD be improved.

[Brainpower]

Thanx! Yeah i made the lines grey so i coud see it on the black background.

(My avatar is animatad only its not good displayes)

http://img458.imageshack.us/img458/6458/thematrixhasyou9bs.gif

[Wizzdom]

Nice idea :) 7/10

[Brainpower]

The Avatar or the alteration?

[ItsDave]

Needs more shades but very good. 8/10

[Revis]

The shape is good, thats about it. The shading needs to be much neater and subtle. The windows on the rim need to be much neater, like in line. Theres some really untidy, double thick lines around. Ooh, and shouldn't the connection, in the top right, join to the outer rim instead of apparently going under it?

[aki-1]

It look's bit weird, like, the outline is bold on sum part's but thin on otha's
but is a nice idea, and it is ya 1st alt, ow and also the window go abit off line, it look's like there just bout 2 fall off the hotel ship

ill giv a :





6/10 :eusa_clap :eusa_clap :eusa_clap :eusa_clap :eusa_clap :eusa_clap :D

[Biseinen]

Idea - 10/10

The actuall alteration 1/10.