My Angel Poem

[StripedTiger]

I wrote a poem for someone i love alot :)

My Angel


I wake up in the morning
and i think about you
seeing you in my mind
your beautiful eyes bright blue
You are my angel
Shinging bright
I see my angel
through the night

I walk into school
with my best friends too
And the first thing i want
Is to go and find you
Because you are my angel
To keep safe and sound
you make me feel happy
when im kicked to the ground

Time drags so slowly
I want to be in your lesson
I love science
I enjoy each session
Because I see my angel
She's shining bright
you are always there
keeping me right

Break times comes
Boys play footy
You stand at the door
Because you are on duty
There is my angel
standing there
With crystal blue eyes
and beautiful hair

I keep a look out
When dinnertime arrives
I look for your hair
and crystal blue eyes
I look for my angel
to make sure shes sound
becuase ill pick her up
when she falls to the ground

As the school day ends
I sigh once more
I look around
just to be sure
I love my angel
Shining bright
I love my angel
My day, my night, my life.

please give comments, advice and tips ^^
im not that good at poetry :P

[Emicat.]

Awww, I think it would be better is you didn't mention Science and walking with your friends and things, I just don't think it sounds right...

maybe you could just call them distractions?

Fav distraction in stead of best friends too?

Sorry If I'm being idiotic.

[Uber-Jason]

*cries* so nice