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Hopeless
11-09-2006, 06:24 PM
For all those who our hearts will pray,
As we come together on this sad day.
We remember those who we all lost
For the price that we couldn't cost
We pray for you who died that day
Our hearts beat as one, Through night and day.

The people who died on the aeroplanes
To the people who died in furious flames
We pray for the raging souls who died
And the families and friends, swallowing their pride
We pray for you who died that day
Our hearts beat as one, Through night and day.

When the towers crumbled down
The whole worlds hearts didn't beat a sound
Until we rubbed our eyes and looked
The picture they had just intook
We couldn't believe our little shocked eyes
That over Two thoasand people had just died

When the firemen went in and saved some lives
Them themselfs had taken a dive
The intoxicating fumes the corridors had
Now we remember being o'so said
We pray for you who died that day
Our hearts beat as one,
Through night,
And day,

-Lava-

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cocaine
11-09-2006, 06:24 PM
Nice poem ;) Wrong forum <3

+Rep

Ree...
11-09-2006, 06:26 PM
kl dats wel gd a bit cheesy bt stil wel gd

-Soph-
11-09-2006, 06:26 PM
Thats a very good meaningful poem.
Well done. +rep.

whitehomey
11-09-2006, 06:27 PM
i liked the flowing rhymes but it was a bit of a silly topic tbh

9/11 neva fagot btw $$remember the ded from that day RIPP$$$$$$$$$

-Soph-
11-09-2006, 06:28 PM
How is it a silly topic?

whitehomey
11-09-2006, 06:29 PM
How is it a silly topic?

sorry I mean some of the rhymes are a bit silly

like "we couldn't cost" makes no sence

-Soph-
11-09-2006, 06:36 PM
I think the message gets through though.

ReInfected
11-09-2006, 06:37 PM
what a horror..Imagein in your were in that building buring hot with temperatures reaching 120F, smoke and debris everywhere, trying to climb down 100 floors to saftey and whats worse is when your climbing down a flight of stairs, and the building shakes, starts caving in, collapsing, getting crushed of hundred of pounds of steel.

Hopeless
11-09-2006, 06:37 PM
I didn't know it was wrong forum sorry

But We got to pay out respects somewhere.

whitehomey
11-09-2006, 06:42 PM
what a horror..Imagein in your were in that building buring hot with temperatures reaching 120F, smoke and debris everywhere, trying to climb down 100 floors to saftey and whats worse is when your climbing down a flight of stairs, and the building shakes, starts caving in, collapsing, getting crushed of hundred of pounds of steel.

basicaly you would be dead before you knew what was hepening

also I was a few blocks from WTC when the planes hit :S

Hopeless
11-09-2006, 06:44 PM
well thats wrong


because people went down 40 floors after it got hit..

so they knew what was happening

whitehomey
11-09-2006, 06:45 PM
well thats wrong


because people went down 40 floors after it got hit..

so they knew what was happening

they wudnt know the building was collapsing :$ there would just be rumbline an stuff. only we know iot was colapsing cos we saw it :eusa_wall:eusa_wall

Hopeless
11-09-2006, 06:52 PM
Well thats half true


because when the first building collapsed they knew the second one was going to aswell

So as i say

half of them knew because the othertower was still up

arouse
11-09-2006, 08:45 PM
very meaningful, well done.

brandon
11-09-2006, 08:47 PM
Great poem.

pepperoni nipz
11-09-2006, 08:47 PM
no offence, but most of it doesn't really make sense :s

Tanya
11-09-2006, 08:51 PM
aww bless

FlyingJesus
12-09-2006, 12:15 AM
Some of it did seem to just be like.. whatever rhymed went.. so from a poetic view it isn't fantastically written, but nice subject.

-Undiscovered
12-09-2006, 05:30 PM
nice poem well done

brapbrap
18-09-2006, 07:19 PM
what a horror..Imagein in your were in that building buring hot with temperatures reaching 120F, smoke and debris everywhere, trying to climb down 100 floors to saftey and whats worse is when your climbing down a flight of stairs, and the building shakes, starts caving in, collapsing, getting crushed of hundred of pounds of steel.

Is thee a need to say that we all know.

MusicPalace
09-11-2006, 03:05 AM
oh my gosh. This is wonderfull. You care so much! You are an awesome writer, i hope to see more from u.
+rep when your off temp. ban

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