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Calzeh
24-02-2005, 07:54 PM
Okay, please be nice because it took a lot of courage to post this rofl.

Also if you think im pathetic for being afraid of the dentist, thats your opinion, just dont be too evil :P Constructive criticism welcome, as are any reasonable comments you would like to make. :)


Anyway:
setting - dentist at school
format - poem
inspiration - an experience I had at the densist last Wednesday



Is this insanity?

As I lay there, still and numb,
I glanced up at the masked creature.
It was clutching a thing I feared,
A needle; long, sharp and filled with an unknown drug.

The creature bent down, and put the needle in my mouth.
I shut my eyes tightly,
Trying to blank out a situation I hated.
I could taste the drug;
Was this venom? Evil, like snakes?

Then the world seemed to be spinning.
I thought of the thing that makes me happy.
The person who understands me.
Someone I love...Jin

Now the chair was almost swinging gently,
Like being on a lilo in the sea, rocking with the waves.

When I was dismissed from the room I felt strange.
I dashed to the toilets and peered into the mirror.
‘Nope, I look the same as usual’ I reassured myself.

Now I found myself wandering to the water machine,
It was all a daze, a blur of people around me.

Next I walked up the corridor.
I felt like a ghost, gliding through the crowd.

Again the world was spinning,
Voices were just a murmour in a foreign language.
Am I really here?
Why do I feel so alone in this river of moving people?
Could I be insane?

2hd.
24-02-2005, 07:57 PM
yup ur insane:p

AngJum
24-02-2005, 07:59 PM
:o Thats a really good poem Cally =]

Fingerboots
24-02-2005, 08:03 PM
Wow Cally, thats a good poem and I think it's great that you can post stuff like that.
Well done you ^^

Janumz
24-02-2005, 09:13 PM
Wow ^.^ nice poem..
I hate the dentist too.. -Gets worried- :'(

Fridayz
24-02-2005, 09:46 PM
well done cally :p

Dave,
24-02-2005, 10:00 PM
I am not into poetry much and I also like the dentist...

Mined
24-02-2005, 10:06 PM
Yep you are superlyinginately Insane :D

GommeInc
24-02-2005, 11:01 PM
Half is the dentist, half of it was just you drugged.

Jseb
24-02-2005, 11:28 PM
Wow!!! That amazing! Really i aint joking lol i understand it! lol and i am french lol really impressif. I use to be feelling like this before but after u had to see him twice a month for like 2 year its just change lol but really amazing! :D

.mcgovlau.
25-02-2005, 04:10 PM
i like the dentist...hahaha he gave me perfect teeths n.....well :D mines really hott dentist hahahaha Dr Chase ;) *purrrrrrs*

partie2
04-03-2005, 06:25 AM
Thats a really nice poem :) I hate to make one in school once and mine was sooo rubbish but anyway.

Well done :D

:Kimi
26-03-2005, 08:17 AM
good poem, im scared of dentist too :( >:(

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