Beggining to my story (may offend, sorry)

[-=rooty987=-]

This may offend some people. This story is sad. I hope you like it.

He lay there, curled up on the cold grass, shivering. Glass lay on the floor, his glasses shattered. His clothes where ripped to shreds. Laughs could be heard from the distance, but as they laughed tears fell to the wet grass from his battered eyes. Blood dripped down his bony hand, and he didn’t move. Not at all. He lay silent, but inside his head, the noise was atrocious.

The day drew to an end, and the sky darkened, and the moon shone bright. Footsteps sounded on the concrete floor. He was on his way home, his clothes where blood stained, and his staggered without his glasses. His bare feet scraped on the stone, and tear fell from his eyes in pain.
He finally reached the door of his home. He lifted his torn hand and knocked weakly on the door. The door slowly opened. There his Dad stood. His face, angry, he grabbed his son by his hair and dragged him inside. Screams where heard by his neighbours. The peaceful night was rather disturbed.


(not finished)

Please c an c, sorry that it was strong.

[-=rooty987=-]

I no, but the end bit is about abuse.

But thankyou. I think its good for a 12 year old?

[:Kimi]

wow, thats coolies *gives skittles* eheh... 10/10, rep when you add the rest (if its good) :p :p :p :p

[-=rooty987=-]

If i write more, i will end up writing pages!

[:Kimi]

If i write more, i will end up writing pages!

Hehe, moreeee morrreeee, I really wanna know what happends :eusa_wall :eusa_wall :eusa_wall :eusa_pray pwease

Edit: W00T! MY 100th POSTY!

[MYKE!]

Brilliant, rather dramatic.
10/10

reminds me of when i was younger. ah yes, happy days. :)

[:Kimi]

reminds me of when i was younger. ah yes, happy days. :)
lol, I dont think I know anyone that that story can be like, but :eusa_wall proberly my mate Becca (shes a girl tho :s ;) )

[MYKE!]

My friend jamie used to be just like that.
He live with his grandparents now and has behavior problems,
but hes living a good life now :)

[Pulchritudinous]

I hate seeing people being bullied, my mates are kinda mean to the year 7, 8's n stuff, and the grungers, and when I say stuff they'll say something like, 'oooo, goodie two shoes', or something stupid like that...:confused_.

The story was good, even though everyone likes light-hearted, happy stories, life isn't always like that, so I think sad stories are most effective, and it's also nice for a sad story to have a happy ending.
Nicely done.

[Dave,]

I hate seeing people being bullied, my mates are kinda mean to the year 7, 8's n stuff, and the grungers, and when I say stuff they'll say something like, 'oooo, goodie two shoes', or something stupid like that...:confused_.

Well everyones mean to the year 7 and 8's, its the law. But I think its stupid calling people just because they dress different.

Good story though, but its not really that hard to think up.

[-=rooty987=-]

I kno it isnt hard to think up, its the content that counts.

[infatuation]

I dont really like this story as its sad..
but its good.
8/10

[Snowboarding]

Great intro. Rep added :D

[-=rooty987=-]

Thankies. I will finish it one day soon. I cant be bothered atm.

[:Kimi]

I hate seeing people being bullied, my mates are kinda mean to the year 7, 8's n stuff, and the grungers, and when I say stuff they'll say something like, 'oooo, goodie two shoes', or something stupid like that...:confused_.

The story was good, even though everyone likes light-hearted, happy stories, life isn't always like that, so I think sad stories are most effective, and it's also nice for a sad story to have a happy ending.
Nicely done.

awwwww, you can have some Skittles *hands bag of skittles* hehe, only .x-aimee-x. gets the skittles hehe, shhhhhh, dont share them with anyone, there yours, lol :D

[Pulchritudinous]

awwwww, you can have some Skittles *hands bag of skittles* hehe, only .x-aimee-x. gets the skittles hehe, shhhhhh, dont share them with anyone, there yours, lol :D

Er...thanks.

[:Kimi]

Er...thanks.

:( fyne *takes aaway skittles* :p

[la-ur-en]

Hee hee, i think you have an obsession with skittles kimi, you always seem to have a bag!!!

I love the story, i don't know what it's about though...
Is it about the boy getting bullied then going home and being beat up by his dad?
Or is it just his dad who beat him up?

Anywho, good story for a 12 year old. Its quite chilling though that a 12 year old actually can go into real depth about child abuse and bullying!!!!(Not offending you, its a good story, just suprising!)

[-=rooty987=-]

He gets beaten up at school, then at home by his dad. I no it is strong, but i find it easier to write.

[:Kimi]

Hee hee, i think you have an obsession with skittles kimi, you always seem to have a bag!!!


Lol, yeah, I think everyone loves skittles, ahah, I want to live in Skittle World when I am older with my cat :)
***Random***
And then I will get married to Josh in the skittle castle, and then I will have a bath filled up with..... SKITTLES
***Random***

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Ill stop now

*hands skittles to Lauren* :( I CANT STOP AHHHH

lol, I cant stop reading your story skibs. it amaaaazing :)

[Pulchritudinous]

Sorry if I offended you, with you with your skittle obsession thingy, I am very grateful for those imaginary skittles you gave me :p.