Poem Please read and Tell me what you think!

[Blacky04]

Right the other day i was cleaning out some bits and bobs from under my bed when i found a piece of paper which had a poem wrote on it. I then remembered that i wrote this when i was 12 when i first had my heart broken. Hold your sympathy. lol. I thought this poem was good enough to show to you guys! Please rate. Thanks.

A Broken Man

I sit alone
In a crowded room
Dreaming
Dreaming of you

I used to watch
Watch you from a'far.
Your Hair Like Fire
Your eyes like heaven

If i knew then
what i know now
It wouldnt of made any differnce
For my heart was yours

I fell at your feet
3 times or more
Hoping that i could be yours
My hopes came true

When i was yours
And You were mine
The sun seemed brighter
And i forgot all my fears

Time went on
People grew
People Changed
So did you

I soon realised
what was coming
The day came closer
The day of the "dumping"

When you spoke
I felt lighter than air
But not this time
not this time

So now i stand before you
A broken Man
And i want you to know
Thats all i am

[Fraz-man]

damn that reminds me of myself because i never will be able to ask out Jenny (girl i fancy) cus im nervous... :'(

[KevSays]

Extremely well-written and mature.

[Blacky04]

Just go for it... you will regret it if you dont.
God i sound like an agony aunt

:X

[Fraz-man]

well give me some advice...

Cus the people at school (her & my friends) meddle with your 'love' and make it end because of their nagging and keep on saying 'go on kiss her' and 'you 2 are so fridged'.

[Dirgeofcerberus]

Man thats good, well written and very mature, very good poem

[Luayminator]

Articles and stories section , and I dont get it much