My poem its excellent read here please rate

[Bloodkanekiller]

Step by step heart by heart even we go on like toy solider
step by step heart by heart even go on like toy soliders

Years go past
poor authons run away
hurt and in pain
kids lieing on the floor looking down the drain
and kids crying in pain
8 years past
there is no change
will eneyone one stop it
no they didnt
a boy growed up
18 years old
he was stinky and mold
stomac empty
is that a way to live
well it was only the beginning
he got too 20
had lovely parents
found them again
lost them again
died in a bomb
a guy came other to our city
moved to our city cause there was a bomb
called a refugee when he didnt do no wrong
so remember where a band
people can kill themselfs
and then its the end

[Fingerboots]

Is it meant to be based on Eminem's (bad) song? o.O
It's... good.. um.. doesn't really do anything for me I'm sorry. :S Don't know whether it's intentional or not but you have a few spelling/grammatical errors in there, which isn't particularly good for a poem. Well done anyway! =]

[infatuation]

Step by step heart by heart even we go on like toy soldier
step by step heart by heart even go on like toy soldiers

Years go past
poor authons run away
hurt and in pain
kids lieing on the floor looking down the drain
and kids crying in pain
8 years passed
there is no change
will anyone one stop it
no they didnt
a boy grew up
18 years old
he was stinky and mold
stomache empty
is that a way to live
well it was only the beginning
he got to 20
had lovely parents
found them again
lost them again
died in a bomb
a guy came other to our city
moved to our city cause there was a bomb
called a refugee when he didnt do nothing wrong
so remember where a band
people can kill themselfs
and then its the end

Fixed errors ;)

[Fingerboots]

Not all of them :P Authons (no idea what it is, do you mean orphans?) Lieing, stomache, mold, themselfs still spelt wrong xD

[infatuation]

I didn't know that either..
Authons.. weird.
I fixed MOST of them
I thought he meant mold
;)

[la-ur-en]

stop posting this so many times, ITS SOOO ANNOYING!!!!!!!

[Evil]

i dont really get the meaning but i think if i knew wut it ment it would b a good poem