View Full Version : The Ghost ship read here abit scary rate out of 10 no bad comments plz
Bloodkanekiller
23-04-2005, 11:54 AM
Started with the ship and everyone was danceing and a small girl was danceing but everyone got chopped up and she was hangged up in the cuboard so years went past and a crew went to the ship and so you know a swimming pool went up with blood and then the crew went into the ship but they never new that the ship was haunted so keep you eyes peeled said the captin but all of them died but they saved people THE END
scottish
23-04-2005, 11:56 AM
you posting alot of these pointlessly, If Your gonna make a stroy make it about 20 lines not 6 "/
MYKE!
23-04-2005, 12:09 PM
waaaaaaay too short.
4got-ma-name(clone)
23-04-2005, 12:10 PM
its not even scary ma 5year old bro watches it
Jinxxed
23-04-2005, 12:34 PM
I'm sorry but
1.) It's too short.
2.) It's a bit pointless.
3.) Loads of spelling mistakes.
4.)"THE END" is a lame way to end a story...
Surname
24-04-2005, 04:07 PM
You won't get anywhere if you can't take criticism. And, judging by that "story", it looks like your not going to get anywhere at all. That was rubbish. I would feel I did you a favour if I gave it 1 out of 10.
Painiac
25-04-2005, 09:19 PM
Strange enough what you call a story I call you typing what you can remember of a film you've seen and then calling it your own.... Don't even post stuff like this it is pointless and down-right annoying.
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