Bloodkane POEM 4 CALLED I WAKE UP rate out of 10

[Bloodkanekiller]

I wake up in the morning
and im always yauning
i went to bed at 3:00
and i was tired more or less
going to school is a pain in the back
and my brother called mack goes to be at 9:00
but he is 9
and im 19
alot of difference between
mack is my brother wakes me up
chucked water over me and then i looked up
i said i cant take it no more i left and i ran far
and my head bursted like someone openeing a jar
my brother said he is sorry
but i wont go back i rarther live with my girl friend
and i did and i still saw my brother
and i never thought i would say this
but then i missed him
so i went back and lived with my family
and no more wakeing up for me
i lied in
i lied in
and i never got woke up not once not once

[Bloodkanekiller]

eney rates my poem is good

Edited by Corey777 (Forum Moderator): Please don’t double post, simply edit your previous post.

[lauralol]

Rofl I love your poems bloodkane :'] Write some more, and no need to double post :l

[Bloodkanekiller]

Soz like it was going down the line i needed it to come back up
well rate it plz

[lauralol]

10/10 of course :)

[Evil]

lmao 9/10 u make weird poems

[Steph]

ok....where the hell you got your ideas from for you 'poems'?

[lauralol]

I WAEK UP IN TEH MORNNG
AND IM ALWAYS YAUNNG
I WENT 2 BD AT 30
AND I WAS TIERD MORA OR L3S
GONG 2 SKOOL IS A PANE IN DA BAK
AND MAH BROTH3R CAL3D MAK GOES 2 B AT 90
BUT HA IS 9
AND IM 19
ALOT OF DIFERANCA BTWEN
MAK IS MAH BROTHAR WAEKS M3 UP
CHUK3D W8R OVER MA AND TH3N I LOKED UP
I SADE I CANT TAEK IT NO MORA I LAFT AND I RAN FAR
AND MAH H3AD BURSTAD LIEK SOMEONE OPANENG A MAH BROTHAR SADE HA IS SORY
BUT I WONT GO BAK I RARTH3R LIEV WIT MAH GIRL FREIND
AND I DID AND I STIL SAW MAH BROTHAR
AND I NEVER THOUGHT I WUD SAY THIS
BUT TH3N I MISED HIM
SO I WANT BAK AND LIEVD WIT MAH FMILY
AND NO MORE WAEKNG UP FOR MA
I LEID IN
I LEID IN
AND I NEV3R GOT WOK3 UP NOT ONC3 NOT ONCE


I am just sooooo lovin' it <3

[Surname]

It doesn't really sound like a poem. More like an account of your mornings...

[Painiac]

Indeed... I'm sorry... 4/10