Lost in love

[superstar911]

Side by side
Hand in hand
Leaving footprints in the sand
Walking down a lonesome beach
Growing apart until we cannot reach
We grew further apart andyou slipped away
And now I want you back today
You scared my heart with 'I love you'
Why'd you say it if it wasn't true
Watching the sunset by the sea
I wander do you think of me
Or am i someone your mind left behind
Like someone left back in time
I'll walk back home
Dandering alone
Just wanting you to pick up your phone

by andrew (SuperStar911)

[Ahhlex]

Well done, great poem!:D
Short but sweet, easy to read and understand and constructed well. I would rep you if I could, believe me.

9/10

To Get a 10
On the 6th line you didn't put a space between "andyou", if you did this I would most probably give you a perfect 10.

[superstar911]

Well done, great poem!:D
Short but sweet, easy to read and understand and constructed well. I would rep you if I could, believe me.

9/10

To Get a 10
On the 6th line you didn't put a space between "andyou", if you did this I would most probably give you a perfect 10.

thanks :) glad you like it

[Carlos]

good poem, i enjoyed. + rep :)

[superstar911]

good poem, i enjoyed. + rep :)

thank you, glad you enjoyed it

[omgDAN!]

great poem +rep

[e5..]

cool poem ••

[superstar911]

great poem +rep


cool poem ••


thank you :) and cheers for the rep everyone.