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Fez
01-07-2007, 06:46 PM
Love is the cold dimmension of a haunted dream
Love is the warm sensation of a enlightened soul
Love is a winding road of perilous mean
Love is something in a aspiration goal

But what is love?
Is it a fool's gold?
Is it the silent dove?
Does it treat you like a mold?

Love is the spiriling darkness of never ending night
Love is the light of the sun, burnt to a crisp
Love is the hearts of demons, lost in fight
Love is the hatred of a ugly list

What does love feel like?
Is it the lonliest ponder?
Is it the sharpest pike?
All I know is.... I wanT to pondar....


QUICK 5 MINUTE POEM BTW, JUST NEEDED TO DO SOMETHING

Nightrose
01-07-2007, 09:32 PM
:PThats pretty good actually

Antallica
03-07-2007, 05:30 PM
very creative. =]

-JT-
06-07-2007, 12:39 AM
Its okay however it doesnt convey the same idea. The idea of a poem - however difficult to define - is portray an idea or emotion in a poetic mannor. What you have done is taken meaningful words and wrote something that conveys many ideas and aspects of the one thing which an a way is clever, however not really what a poem should be intended it do.

It is however acceptable. But two lines of a poem should not be juxtaposed in such a mannor that they become a paradox as harsh as the one in the first two lines.

Regardless, it does makes sense. Well done :eusa_danc

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