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patrick.
26-11-2007, 07:46 PM
Btw just to let you know, It's aimed at kids so if you don't find it appealing then i'm not bothered, but if you do, i'd love to hear your comments


Once upon a time there was a kangaroo named Isaac. He lived with his mother Ingrid and his Father Ishmael. He also had a sister named Imogen. In his hometown of Happyville lived his family along with 4 others. Happyville was a small place with very little population. One day, Isaac was playing balloon ball with his buddy Andrew. It was a sunny day, as usual and he saw something in the sky.
" Look Andrew! There's a sheep in the sky! "
Andrew turned to where Isaac was pointing.
"..and it's moving! " Isaac continued.
" What do you think it is? It can't be a sheep, sheep live in fields!"
Explained Andrew.
"o." Isaac was baffled.


Hope you like it, it's only the beginning and stuff.. Rate out of 10 please :)

-Sweex
01-12-2007, 04:45 PM
hey thats quite good for a kids story :P! When you have worked on some more I would like to here it. Ill see what my younger sister thinks (she is 7).

Soy
01-12-2007, 07:14 PM
Sounds good so far

patrick.
02-12-2007, 09:08 AM
Thanks for the comments + rep both

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