Not Waving But Drowning (Sorry, rather sad)

[jinxii]

Not Waving But Drowning


Losing myself in your icy blues,
Not waving...but drowning.
Trapped between two mirrors now
A single tear
And the glassy reflections
Of those eyes I so highly prize.
The droplet falls to your face,
But instead of flinching you remain silent.
For a moment it looks like you are crying too
And I smile.

The irony is too much to bear,
And the image of a young girl
Burdened with a solitary teardrop is shattered.
A cascade of tears make their way across the crumpled contours of my face.
Sadness and beauty cannot co-exist
Except in the realms of media and imagination.

At last it dawns that those eyes
Those eyes so blue, those eyes so fine
Those eyes that I so highly prize
Will never more gaze into mine.

And I close your lids and lashes,
For us, we disbelieving ones, I would burn this church,
But for now I lay these roses on your chest,
And bid you farewell as I slide stationary from the beautiful, black hearse.

[Hab-in-a-box]

i dont get it i counldny be botherd readin it

[RareWolf]

i dont get it :l

[-=rooty987=-]

I'm 12, and i think i get it.
Basically, this person has died, she is not waving goodbye, but suffering/hurting aka drowning.
She is looking into this person's eyes, and they are dead, so she closes the eyes.
Now you get it?
Love Dan
xxx
10/10, some people just don't read poetry like it should be read.

[jinxii]

Well done Skibs, that's exactly it. ;)

[Vause]

wow, this has touched me! Well done! 10/10 plus rep, this is one of the best things ive read in a long time :)

[Krypsis]

Umm Ive heard that in a book/thing ive read before hmmm, nice find though :)

[jinxii]

Laxative!

That is ENTIRELY my own work, the only influence I've had is the opening line, which was an adaptation of My Chemical Romance's 'Demolition Lovers'' first line: "Hand in mine, into your icy blues'.

Do not acuse me of plagiarism without proof, and especially with no foundation for evidence, as that writing is completely my own.

[eggd2]

v. good 9.5/10

[lukeisok]

This is very touching and has a lot of depth, I understand this and it causes no confusion.

Well done.

I also added rep to you =]

[Craig]

very good 10/10 ur a talented writer :D

[Jane]

Wow that's amazing! Lax, dont accuse her without proof. You're a extremely talented writer +rep

[-=rooty987=-]

Woo, i got it right. I am a bit tipsy lmao, oops. Anyway, hi.
Love Dan
xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx

[jinxii]

Thank you everybody. =) Trying not to conform to the common (mis)conception that all good poems rhyme. Am expanding creativity to write poems and be artistic and all that jazz (you can see my work in this forum, the Articles section of Habbox and the Other Pictures forum).

And Skibs., you show remarkable understanding for somebody so young. Apologies if that sounds patronising, but I'm being sincere; your work is very meaningful, especially for somebody of your age.

[-=rooty987=-]

I am about to write a poem, just about life.
Thankyou Jinxii.
Love Dan
xxx