New story/novel I want to write

[Gibs960]

I had an idea for a book, and I really want to write it and maybe keep editing it and get it really good, I want to be a writer when I grow up so it could be a big move for me just to get a book finished, and possibly (this would be amazing to happen) be published. So I'll just run you through the basic plot and I'll ask you a couple of questions and ask for feedback :rolleyes:

So it's about a vampire family, haven't decided on a name yet, and they meet up with a human (slayer) one of the vampires falls in love with the human, they don't know he's a slayer, and they accept him in. But when one of the vampires disappears, he is the first person they accuse. The vampire that fell in love with him, doesn't believe it's him, but the rest of the family kill the slayer. The rest of the family flee apart from the vampire who fell in love with the slayer, and 6 months later, she is on a quest. To kill the rest of her family.

OK, my first question, does the whole "human vampire love" thing sound to much like twilight?
Second question, does anyone have any ideas what the family could be called, and where it could be set, in England :(H)

Thanks all feedback is welcome. I haven't started writing it yet, I want to get some feedback first :)

[Misawa]

DON'T EVER SHARE YOUR NOVEL IDEAS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Far too dangerous in today's world, keep your ideas strictly to yourself and write!

No one wants to read vampiric romance novels after the success of Twilight, despite the author having a complete lack of writing ability. If you want to write about vampires, go the horror route. Please don't support the downfall of a classic horror convention.

[FlyingJesus]

Seems kinda daft considering dude was a slayer and deserves what he got for killing his his gf's dad or whichever one he does in. Also why would the family run off if they've already killed the slayer?

[MrGazet]

DON'T EVER SHARE YOUR NOVEL IDEAS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Far too dangerous in today's world, keep your ideas strictly to yourself and write!

No one wants to read vampiric romance novels after the success of Twilight, despite the author having a complete lack of writing ability. If you want to write about vampires, go the horror route. Please don't support the downfall of a classic horror convention.

I agree with him.You should come up with another interesting story and personally,I wouldn't want another vampire romance stories

[Gibs960]

Thankyou so much I'm +repping you all for your feedback.

[Homosexual]

I would buy that, and I hate Vampire books. If it has a lot of blood and gore and is macabre, I'd read it :)

[Gibs960]

Thanks, depends how I write it, but I did intend to have a lot of blood in it.

[N-Dubz]

Twilight isn't the only vampire romance novel that is now massively famous. How can you say that nobody buys the books about vampire romance anymore because of Twilight? If I remember correctly, as soon as Vampire Diaries premiered on TV, the books went straight into number one positions on A LOT of book websites, same with the true blood series (The Southern Vampire Mysteries).

I do agree that the plot seems kinda confusing, but if you really wanna write it don't feel discouraged.

[Cheryl]

I wouldn't bother trying to get a book published at the age of eleven as your vocabulary is no where near wide enough, or interesting enough :D

[Gibs960]

I've actually had a short book published in the north west.

[kuzkasate]

I wouldn't bother trying to get a book published at the age of eleven as your vocabulary is no where near wide enough, or interesting enough :D

Or you could always keep on editing it over the years as your vocabulary expands... but that'll take some time (h)

[Wig44.]

It's good to have a very rough plan, but I prefer to let things formulate as I write and never make a cast iron plan at the start! Also, don't be afraid to delete half of the story if you feel it isn't going where you had hoped or the quality isn't up to scratch.

[Gibs960]

I was thinkin that, I hate writin like that, I change it too much, so its pointless me writin or thinkin of a definitive plan.

[Cheryl]

just wondering what the name of the book you had published was

[Gibs960]

It was one that was short stories, a couple of us had a go, only a few got through :) You wouldn't be able to find it, only available in North West and it'd even be hard to find in North West :)

[sammy]

There are a huge amount of Vampire Romance novels out there nowadays.

Don't want to be negative, but that genre is extremely over-used at the moment. Also your plot is very complicated and to be honest i don't understand the majority of it.

[Tenbeta]

It was one that was short stories, a couple of us had a go, only a few got through :) You wouldn't be able to find it, only available in North West and it'd even be hard to find in North West :)


Yes there was something like that which I was published in here in Wales For a poetry competition.. "Young Writers - I have a dream" for South East Wales. :)

[Gibs960]

Yeah, it was like that :)

[Haaaaarry1]

There are a huge amount of Vampire Romance novels out there nowadays.

Don't want to be negative, but that genre is extremely over-used at the moment. Also your plot is very complicated and to be honest i don't understand the majority of it.

couldn't agree more really

as soon as i read the first line of your plot i just thought of twilight straight away with the vampire-human love thing. and i know you are all saying theres loads of others like that, but i dont really know the others that well. seeing your twilight sig as well, it might come across to people that you are sort of copying it. even though the plot does sound quite interesting, i don't think it would be something that i would personally be interested in, but it could grow into something if you write it well. good luck :)

[HotelUser]

I have to say it does sound quite a bit like Twilight. You'd have to add many attributes to the characters and plot which make make your story differentiate from the Twilight series.

[Gibs960]

Could you give me any thing that would change it from the twilight saga? I know it sounds like it but I don't know what I could change.

[HotelUser]

For a start you could give the main girl a unique physical description, and define her personality in a way that is completely different from Bella. Other than that you could make sure the supporting characters aren't exactly the same as in Twilight; meaning the girl's living conditions could differ from living alone with her father, there could be no natives in your story, the vampire family members could have different amounts of males and females and a less leaderly father than in Twilight.

[Hiro]

I had an idea for a book, and I really want to write it and maybe keep editing it and get it really good, I want to be a writer when I grow up so it could be a big move for me just to get a book finished, and possibly (this would be amazing to happen) be published. So I'll just run you through the basic plot and I'll ask you a couple of questions and ask for feedback :rolleyes:

So it's about a vampire family, haven't decided on a name yet, and they meet up with a human (slayer) one of the vampires falls in love with the human, they don't know he's a slayer, and they accept him in. But when one of the vampires disappears, he is the first person they accuse. The vampire that fell in love with him, doesn't believe it's him, but the rest of the family kill the slayer. The rest of the family flee apart from the vampire who fell in love with the slayer, and 6 months later, she is on a quest. To kill the rest of her family.

OK, my first question, does the whole "human vampire love" thing sound to much like twilight?
Second question, does anyone have any ideas what the family could be called, and where it could be set, in England :(H)

Thanks all feedback is welcome. I haven't started writing it yet, I want to get some feedback first :)

Sounds too much like a mashup of Twilight and Blade...

[Sly]

Doesn't sound very good if I'm honest xD

[Sharon]

Sounds pretty good :} If I were you i'd acutally write some and post on HxF just to prove you people wrong and 11yr olds are A M A Z I N G

Sorry I went a bit off topic there :}

Trembling through the forest with Maria by my side I stood there, which way? I had no clue. Infact my best idea was to scream for help but
who in their right mind would come out here? Why am I even here? Truth was I can't answer any of those questions. All I know is this isn't going to
be a fun experience.

actually this is ******* **** LOL but yeah this took me two minutes im not into the vampire rubbish so sorry but yeah rate slate id give it a 2/10 :S

[HotelUser]

Not to shabby for, as you said, someone who's 11 :)


Sounds pretty good :} If I were you i'd acutally write some and post on HxF just to prove you people wrong and 11yr olds are A M A Z I N G

Sorry I went a bit off topic there :}

Trembling through the forest with Maria by my side I stood there, which way? I had no clue. Infact my best idea was to scream for help but
who in their right mind would come out here? Why am I even here? Truth was I can't answer any of those questions. All I know is this isn't going to
be a fun experience.

actually this is ******* **** LOL but yeah this took me two minutes im not into the vampire rubbish so sorry but yeah rate slate id give it a 2/10 :S

[Sharon]

what happened to the lines :O dmdm

@HOTELUSER WOO THANK YOU HUNNY +REP XXXXXXX

Trembling through the forest with Maria by my side I stood there, which way? I had no clue. Infact my best idea was to scream for help but who in their right mind would come out here? Why am I even here? Truth was I can't answer any of those questions. All I know is this isn't going to be a fun experience.

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[ItsDave]

It sounds like Blade but in a bizarre reverse. You're just adorable!

[StripedTiger]

Setting: lake district? rural areas seem better than a city?

As for the twilight bit, make the setting of the situation part of the first chapter. Make the book about a vampire out to kill the rest of her family for killing her innocent lover. Maybe a twist at the end where the disappeared family members shows up or something?