feedback? :)

[Boot]

New:
http://i55.tinypic.com/2luqwcl.jpg

[Jordan]

Looks really good! Some errors but thats okay!

[Boot]

Looks really good! Some errors but thats okay!
which errors? :)

[Nick]

Theres a whole heap of stuff just cut of. Also missing their black lines

[Boot]

Theres a whole heap of stuff just cut of. Also missing their black lines

what stuff.. the cans?

[Nick]

http://img148.imageshack.us/img148/8558/azcbog.png

[Zeptis]

yes, and the limo, and one of the ramps

[Boot]

http://img148.imageshack.us/img148/8558/azcbog.png

ok just gunna edit that stuff now :)

[Boot]

http://i55.tinypic.com/2rpfng8.jpg
edited version

[Nick]

The spray cans should come out more not just instaly be cut of and the guys shoes near the door needs work on and so does the guy doing some blackflip with the beanie. The wheel on the car cant move because its been cut :P

[Boot]

The spray cans should come out more not just instaly be cut of and the guys shoes near the door needs work on and so does the guy doing some blackflip with the beanie. The wheel on the car cant move because its been cut :P

think i'm just gunna leave it at that.. but thanks though haha

[alexe49]

Love it! The second version is looking much better than the first,

Alex

[vz]

Its not the best I have seen... but I like the thought gone into it(:

[Stephen]

i think it looks a complete mess

no offense

[Chris]

There are a lot of errors, as pointed out. Just try and fix them first before entering. :)

[Boot]

There are a lot of errors, as pointed out. Just try and fix them first before entering. :)

it's been edited and most of the errors are fixed :)
reason for it having to be edited so much is because i rushed it

http://i52.tinypic.com/apjywx.jpg

[Calvin]

it's been edited and most of the errors are fixed :)
reason for it having to be edited so much is because i rushed it

http://i52.tinypic.com/apjywx.jpgIt's not good, and not completely bad.

- You need to make the graffiti look like they're on the actual wall, not sticking out. Maybe follow Kasabian's tutorial about posters in the graphics forum somewhere.
- The ramps are all cut out, I'm assuming because you've ripped them from Kasbian's entry here (http://www.habboxforum.com/showthread.php?t=708570&page=1)?
- Why are the guys on skateboards just randomly placed on the alteration? You need to make it more realistic as if they're on the ramp not falling from the sky.
- You're using harsh colours for the graffiti, use some more realistic and dark colours, and also lower the opacity.
- The bin in the corner next to the yellow lady is raised up a bit, what is it supposed to be balancing on?
- You need to improve the shading on the cans too

Just my little bit of feedback. :)

[Robi]

Second version looks alot better but still some simple modifications could be made!

[Boot]

It's not good, and not completely bad.

- You need to make the graffiti look like they're on the actual wall, not sticking out. Maybe follow Kasabian's tutorial about posters in the graphics forum somewhere.
- The ramps are all cut out, I'm assuming because you've ripped them from Kasbian's entry here (http://www.habboxforum.com/showthread.php?t=708570&page=1)?
- Why are the guys on skateboards just randomly placed on the alteration? You need to make it more realistic as if they're on the ramp not falling from the sky.
- You're using harsh colours for the graffiti, use some more realistic and dark colours, and also lower the opacity.
- The bin in the corner next to the yellow lady is raised up a bit, what is it supposed to be balancing on?
- You need to improve the shading on the cans too

Just my little bit of feedback. :)

nah i never ripped the ramps from his work, but i see what you mean, thanks for the feedback

[Stephen]

i'll tell ya what it actually looks like... know them sticker books where they give you a background and then the backpage there's loads of stickers that you can stick anywhere on the background

like that

[Jssy]

I hate that the graffiti just looks like its floating but good try :)

[Boot]

i'll tell ya what it actually looks like... know them sticker books where they give you a background and then the backpage there's loads of stickers that you can stick anywhere on the background

like that

:$ ...

Edited by Jordesh (Forum Moderator): Please do not pointless post

[Ms.Aquamarine]

It's not the best, but with suggestions and tips everyone is giving you, it would look incredible! Make sure to take your time. :P

[Boot]

It's not the best, but with suggestions and tips everyone is giving you, it would look incredible! Make sure to take your time. :P

yeah i'm gunna redo all of it and get it in before the deadline :)

[Ms.Aquamarine]

Nice! Can't wait to see it!~ :)

[Kasabian]

Admittedly, I've tried avoiding this for a while.

http://i.imgur.com/TSBjs.png

Ok.

- Why have you randomly cut out the room? And the lines aren't even straight round the edges. And theres no 1px Black Outline?
- The Limo has 'improved' since your initial entry, but theres still choppy cut outs and theres no black outline again.
- The girl sat on the chair on the left hand side. Again, another choppy cut out. with no black outline.
- The Ramps. Not gonna lie, they look ****. Choppy cut out, and no black outline again.
- The levitating skateboarders. Where were these taken from? I don't believe you've made them(but if you have, I apologize). They look out of place and you have to take into consideration the size of them in comparison to the ramps.
- The Spray cans & paint on the floor. Gah, eyesores in themselves. You've used bog standard paint colours? These should be from a habbo colour wheel, rather than paints own. They should also have shading.
- The random floating bin on the right. What's even with that!?

As said previously in this thread, follow this tutorial (http://www.habboxforum.com/showthread.php?t=707125) on how to make your Graffiti look better on the wall.

Hope this helps.

[Boot]

Admittedly, I've tried avoiding this for a while.

http://i.imgur.com/TSBjs.png

Ok.

- Why have you randomly cut out the room? And the lines aren't even straight round the edges. And theres no 1px Black Outline?
- The Limo has 'improved' since your initial entry, but theres still choppy cut outs and theres no black outline again.
- The girl sat on the chair on the left hand side. Again, another choppy cut out. with no black outline.
- The Ramps. Not gonna lie, they look ****. Choppy cut out, and no black outline again.
- The levitating skateboarders. Where were these taken from? I don't believe you've made them(but if you have, I apologize). They look out of place and you have to take into consideration the size of them in comparison to the ramps.
- The Spray cans & paint on the floor. Gah, eyesores in themselves. You've used bog standard paint colours? These should be from a habbo colour wheel, rather than paints own. They should also have shading.
- The random floating bin on the right. What's even with that!?

As said previously in this thread, follow this tutorial (http://www.habboxforum.com/showthread.php?t=707125) on how to make your Graffiti look better on the wall.

Hope this helps.

yeah it does help, idk why i was using them sort of colours, that was my first attempt at alts and like you've pointed out, it failed which i know

[Kasabian]

Sorry if it came across a little harsh.

[Boot]

Sorry if it came across a little harsh.

it's fine, being harsh is the key lol

[Maatt.]

Its not too bad,, but with edits it could be a whole lot sharper :) Good try.

[Aaron]

Looks cool :P

[Jordan:A]

Looks nice, better than most of the other ones

[Boot]

Looks cool :P

thanks mate =]

[Manhattan]

Hey Boot,

I like it. Apart from the mistakes Bam pointed out I think it wouldn't do any harm to start going for more complex ideas. For example you could've added say one or two more skate ramps and more caricatures.

Other than that it's quite a good piece.

[Boot]

Hey Boot,

I like it. Apart from the mistakes Bam pointed out I think it wouldn't do any harm to start going for more complex ideas. For example you could've added say one or two more skate ramps and more caricatures.

Other than that it's quite a good piece.

thanks, next time i shall :)