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Haley
20-07-2011, 11:08 AM
http://i1212.photobucket.com/albums/cc442/HabboAlt/alt7.png
This is my first alteration, it took me an hour. There are a lot of line issues. Example: the lines
go diagonal too much or too little etc. The house is poorly shaded, I'm going to need time with that but I am tired so I decided to post it now to see the criticism I get.

Rate or Hate?

Kasabian
20-07-2011, 11:17 AM
As you said, the lines are the main issue here. The diagonal lines should be like this;

http://i.imgur.com/eCy88.png

Like you said the shading needs work, although the different colours used on the bus is good. :)

dbgtz
20-07-2011, 12:49 PM
In additions to the lines as shown above, the grass has no shading either. I think you tried too much without understanding much about shading and nothing about the isometric view point, try a small alt and just do more over time.

Haley
20-07-2011, 05:06 PM
In additions to the lines as shown above, the grass has no shading either. I think you tried too much without understanding much about shading and nothing about the isometric view point, try a small alt and just do more over time.
I have a lot of small alts on my computer. Whether it's a terrier with a bow tie. A zombie. A house. etc. I got bored with doing all those so I tried this. So basically it's not my "first alt" but my "first scene"

geo
20-07-2011, 05:08 PM
It's quite nice, but I think it needs to be shaded a lot more. :)

Sharon
20-07-2011, 05:09 PM
The grass needs a lot of work, but I really like it! Hope you post the finished result.

Liam
20-07-2011, 05:13 PM
I like the magic wand/sunflower.. that's about it - 3/10.

Maatt.
20-07-2011, 05:14 PM
I like the bag.. ;3
The rest is just the lines and the shading, NICE TRY! :D
REP

Haley
21-07-2011, 03:26 PM
Thanks, Matt. Also that little thing in the grass Is a wand.

Aaron
21-07-2011, 03:29 PM
Ooh, that looks good! :)

dbgtz
21-07-2011, 05:21 PM
I have a lot of small alts on my computer. Whether it's a terrier with a bow tie. A zombie. A house. etc. I got bored with doing all those so I tried this. So basically it's not my "first alt" but my "first scene"

You got bored of small alts but not a large one? :S There's no real point doing something this large if you can't master the basics.

Kasabian
21-07-2011, 05:26 PM
You got bored of small alts but not a large one? :S There's no real point doing something this large if you can't master the basics.

This, I'm afraid.

Haley
22-07-2011, 02:46 AM
I'm lost. :s

lukeyo
22-07-2011, 05:01 AM
It has potential, i suggest using more vibrant colors, not so toned and dark. Keep it in ratio though, don't clash the colors. Heres a great website to help you get your grips around pixel art.
Pixel Art Tutorials (http://www.pixeljoint.com/pixels/tutorials.asp)

Rainbow
29-07-2011, 05:18 PM
It looks good but i think the yellow line on the road looks like its coming up if you get me? :D

Sensable
31-07-2011, 09:23 AM
Grass needs better shading :S

Narnat,
31-07-2011, 10:16 AM
I think you have mad a fairly good effort, obvious points that people have put above but hey! everyone has to start somewhere! +Rep

james,
31-07-2011, 10:47 AM
Its nice, just try shading it ;) init bro

Showder
13-08-2011, 02:34 PM
I got a question.
Alterations are time consuming so,
How do you actually make them?

Showda.

Jacob-G4E
13-08-2011, 10:30 PM
This has potential, but it needs loads of work.

Kasabian
13-08-2011, 10:42 PM
This thread is 3 weeks old, great bump.

Edited by Infectious (Forum Super Moderator): Please do not make off topic posts!

Jurv
14-08-2011, 04:02 AM
It's quite nice if you ask me, did you create the backpack yourself? If so it's fab! :)

Casio
14-08-2011, 09:31 AM
Would you mind if I give it a shot?

Valley
16-08-2011, 03:51 PM
I like it, But I also think you could add some more details to the grass.. : )

FishyMy
17-08-2011, 12:31 AM
gr8 honey

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xxSweetnSpicyxx
18-08-2011, 09:05 PM
It's good but the diagonals are a bit messy :P
I also feel the grass is missing something, and what's that random little messy star thing in the middle of the grass? It also needs a bit more shading.

But I'm loving the backpack! And for that… +rep I'm loving the bus too!!

Wow this thread was been bumped a lot?

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