Week I: Weekly Room Pick

[Brad]

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Hey Habbox
We have our second contender for this week's Room Pick! We have a room from Sandoo. It is his Tortuga Plains Herpetaologist Camp.
Sandoo will be the first entry into the Category, "Best Outdoors/Wilderness Room".


http://i1370.photobucket.com/albums/ag250/Brad_Kessler/sandoo_zps117cdba6.jpg


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Description: This room blew me away the first time I saw it. It is a herpetologist camp, which I am assuming it has to do with plants, and outdoors researching. The detail in everything is so neat and it definitely deserves to be in the running. The thing that stands out the most is the tent, and the surrounding area. It brings the room to life.
Below I will list the things I liked and didn't like about the room:

http://i1370.photobucket.com/albums/ag250/Brad_Kessler/sandoo2_zps6924436d.jpgWhat I liked
The Detail in the tent and surrounding
The choice of room layout, flowed very well and easily
Waterfalls were well placed and played a huge role in the whole room

What I didn't like
Some plants were not coordinating with the room as a wholehttp://i1370.photobucket.com/albums/ag250/Brad_Kessler/Sandoo1_zpsdd90c6b2.jpg
The different colours of the rocks around the waterfall
Based upon the pros and the cons that I had stated, I would give this room a 8/10. The room brings a natural side of it and it makes you feel that you are right there in Tortuga. It was well built, and definitely deserves to be on the Best Outdoors/wilderness category.

Thanks Sandoo for being our first pick for this week! I'll be in contact with you on the forum for further questions!

If you are unsure as to what this all is, please refer to this post HERE (http://www.habboxforum.com/showthread.php?t=804373&p=8205307#post8205307)

[Chippiewill]

Week I: Weekly Room Pick
Perhaps you should change up the titles between articles?


We have our second contender for this week's Room Pick! We have a room from Sandoo. It is his Tortuga Plains Herpetaologist Camp.
This potential sentence is missing conjunctions.


Sandoo will be the first entry into the Category, "Best Outdoors/Wilderness Room".
Tenses: Sandoo is the first entry.


It is a herpetologist camp, which I am assuming it has to do with plants, and outdoors researching.
Did you do any research before writing the article?


The detail in everything is so neat and it definitely deserves to be in the running.
You already put it in the running, it was your choice too. Again, a tenses issue.


What I liked
Again, ******* tenses. Do you not still like these factors?


I would give this room a 8/10
Your article and this thread have different ratings.


It was well built, and definitely deserves to be on the Best Outdoors/wilderness category.
******* tenses.

Article Specific:

To read the article, click "Read More"
Jesus ****, I had no clue that's what pressing "Read More & Comment" did.

Your article has two key issues:
* Your tenses are all over the place
* You've never heard of a conjunction other than 'and'.

I'm sorry if this comes across has hyper critical, however this article is actually an improvement over the previous one, even if you are still insisting on using the Oxford comma outside of a list:

which I am assuming it has to do with plants, and outdoors researching.

Keep working at it.

[Brad]

Keep working at it.

Thanks I guess? Although I would of preferred this in a PM. Now you're just making me look like a fool.

[Chippiewill]

Thanks I guess? Although I would of preferred this in a PM. Now you're just making me look like a fool.
Now you're making me look like an *******..

♫ It's the circle of life ♫

Sorry, I'll PM you in future.

[e5]

Regardless of the way it was written, it is a good room review and well set out.

I've seen that room posted before and I think it's a deserved winner :D I kind of think the banana plant is a bit random though.

[Sandoo]

Really kind words, solid review. Thanks so much for the pick!

[Rachel]

I do like the article and the room itself :) I would give it 8/10 as well which it is a great score :)