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Addie
24-09-2005, 07:08 PM
Hey! I’m April and I’ve lived in Scotland for my whole life. Anyway me and my sister Rebekah are twins we are really identical. And it’s our 10th birthday today.


Chapter 1.
Our 10th Birthday

I woke up and I looked at the clock, it was 10am, I woke Rebekah up and said ‘’Happy 10th birthday!’’ ‘’Happy birthday’’ she said. ‘’C’mon lets go and wake mum and dad up!’’ I said excitedly. So we opened the door and glanced in our mum and dad’s room. ‘’Must be downstairs’’ Rebekah said. ‘’Yea I suppose’’ I said. We went downstairs into the living room and our mum and dad were sitting on the couch watching the television. Mum looked around when she saw us at the door she nudged dad. ‘’Happy 10th Birthday!’’ They said. ‘’Well c’mon! Open your presents’’ Dad said. So me and Rebekah sat on the floor and opened our presents. ‘’Wow!’’ I said. It was a pink, glittery necklace saying APRIL. ‘’Do you like it?’’ Mum asked ‘’I love it’’ I said. Rebekah got the same except it had REBEKAH written on it. Rebekah opened another present and got a orange t-shirt saying ‘’Back Off! I’m allergic to you’’, yellow shorts, red socks and pink baseball boots. And a couple of other stuff. I got a pink t-shirt saying ‘’ Friends are Forever, Boys are whatever!’’, orange shorts, green socks and pink baseball boots. And we both got a kind of weird top with an arrow pointing saying I’m with my twin. After we put on our new clothes and boots we went outside to play. On the street we met our friend Chloe. ‘’Happy birthday’’ she said. She gave us both friendship bracelets. ‘’Aw thanks we love them’’ me and Rebekah said. ‘’Its ok I have one too.’’ Chloe said. ‘’Want to come to our house?’’ I said. ‘’Yea sure’’ Chloe replied. So we walked to our house and went inside. ‘’Rebekah? April? We have something to tell you’’ Mum and Dad said as we went into the living room. ‘’What?’’ we both answered ‘’We are taking you both and one friend to Disneyland’’ Mum answered ‘’THAT IS SOOO GREAT!’’ we shouted. ‘’We want to take Chloe if her mum and dad lets her come’’ I said ‘’ My mum and dad are going away for their anniversary for seven days anyway so I will be aloud’’ she answered ‘’Great!’’ Rebekah said ‘’When are we going?’’ I asked ‘’Next week’’ Dad said ‘’Well! Chloe go and tell your parents!’’ I said jumping up and down ‘’Chloe also tell them tomorrow we are going shopping so we will get you new clothes’’ my mum said. ‘’Ok ill come back later’’ She said leaving. Later that night me and Rebekah were getting our Pyjamas on and I said ‘’I’m so excited!’’ ‘’Me too’’ she answered ‘’Now lets get to bed! Shopping tomorrow’’ (I wrote it on Microsoft word) so i check spellling.
I will post chapters every day or two. Please comment. I'm hoping to do 30-40 chapters :) And i haven't thought of a title yet (Rate story -/10) :) Thx

Addie
25-09-2005, 12:41 PM
Chapter 2
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Shopping Time!

Rebekah woke me up at 6am. ‘’Get up! GET UP!’’ She said nudging me. ‘’Ok ok!’’ I said. So we put our clothes on and our baseball boots on and went downstairs for breakfast. ‘’Good morning girls’’ Dad said ‘’Morning’’ me and Rebekah said. ‘’What would you like for breakfast?’’ Mum said. ‘’Toast, eggs and bacon’’ me and Rebekah said. It’s funny because we both like nearly everything the same. After we had our breakfast we went to Chloe’s house. We knocked on the door and her mum answered. ‘’Hi Mrs.Richards.’’ I said. ‘’Hi girls, come in the now Chloe is just getting ready’’ she said. Me and Rebekah like Mrs.Richards. She’s so kind. When Chloe came downstairs she was wearing a pink top, blue shorts and her blue baseball boots. ‘’See you later mum!’’ Chloe said as we headed to my house. ‘’I can’t wait to go to Paris!’’ she said. ‘’Me either’’ me and Rebekah said. When we arrived at my house my mum and dad were in the car waiting. ‘’C’mon guys’’ my dad shouted. As we got in the car we drove to the high street. ‘’Now. Girls. Ill give you £150 to get clothes and a McDonalds.’’ My dad said. ‘’Yea ok sure whatever!’’ Rebekah said. So me, Rebekah and Chloe headed to International. We bought some pretty cool clothes and some nice accessories. We then went to McDonalds. We got three happy meals and went back to the town square, were we met my mum and dad. ‘’Ready to head home then?’’ Dad said. ‘’Yup!’’ me, Chloe and Rebekah replied. So as we walked to the car park a car was pulling out. ‘’WATCH IT!’’ Dad screamed. Dad hates it when people do that and they don’t pay attention. ‘’Sorry dude, didn’t see you!’’ The idiot in the car said. ‘’Well be more careful!’’ dad shouted. We got in the car and drove home. When we got home my mum and dad asked to see what we had bought. ‘’Well, I’m going to go home and start *****ng’’ Chloe said. ‘’Ok then we need to pack too’’ Rebekah said. ‘’See you later’’ Me and Rebekah said. So we started to pack. ‘’I’m taking my drawing things’’ I said to Rebekah ‘’Me too’’ she replied. After we all packed I looked at the clock. ‘’Wow! 2:30pm’’ I said. ‘’Yea’’ Mum said. ‘’Can we get sandwiches and head to the square?’’ Rebekah asked. ‘’I suppose so’’ Dad said. ‘’I’ll make your sandwiches’’ Mum answered. After mum had made us sandwiches we headed to the square. There were a couple of kids playing and some just hanging. ‘’Hey Rebekah and April’’ Mikey said. Mikey is a typical ten year old. Rebekah has a major crush on him. And I think he has a crush on her. ‘’I bought you two a birthday present, but didn’t see you yesterday so here’’ He said. He handed us a present in wrapping paper. He bought us both a locket with our names. ‘’Thanks Mikey!’’ Rebekah said. And she even kissed him on the cheek. I just said ‘’Thanks but I got you the same for your birthday next month!’’ Me and Rebekah are the funniest in our school. ‘’Very funny’’ ‘’Do you like it April?’’ He asked ‘’Yea I love it.’’ I replied. ‘’Well? Are you coming to play Hide and Seek with me and the gang?’’ He asked. We kind of have this gang thing with a couple of kids from our class. ‘’Yea we do.’’ I replied quickly. After a couple of games we went inside because it started raining. We went in and our mum gave us dinner. After that at around 10pm we went to bed. Me and Rebekah fell asleep but at around 3am Rebekah woke me up. ‘’April?’’ She whispered ‘’What?’’ I moaned. ‘’Do you think Mikey likes me?’’ she said. ‘’Yea I really think he does. Ask him out.’’ I said ‘’No way! What if he says no?’’ she said. ‘’Well ill ask him out for you. Now go back to sleep!’’ I said. ‘’Thanks!’’ she said. The next day at around 11am I woke up and got dressed. Rebekah was still asleep so I went out to find Mikey. ‘’Hey! Mikey?’’ ‘’Hey April! What’s wrong?’’ he asked. ‘’Nothing’s wrong! I was just asking. Do you like Rebekah?’’ I said. ‘’Obviously she’s one of my best friends’’ he replied. ‘’No I mean do you like like her? As in have a crush on her?’’ I asked. ‘’Don’t take this offensive but I really like her.’’ He said. ‘’Ok because she LIKES you.’’ I said ‘’Coolie.’’ He said. ‘’Well I’ll tell her you to go out’’ I said. ‘’Yea!’’ he said.. I ran into my house and jumped on Rebekah’s bed. ‘’Guess what?’’ I said ‘’What?’’ she said ‘’You and Mikey go out!’’ I replied.

No one is posting >.< and i said i'd have chapter 2 done.So PLEASE PLEASE post your comments! :)

Stacey.
25-09-2005, 03:05 PM
How many stories have you wrote?

This story is looking great at the moment!

Addie
25-09-2005, 03:36 PM
How many stories have you wrote?

This story is looking great at the moment!

Thanks :) Ive wrote alot but not on the computer :o Im looking to do around 30 chapters on this one :)

Bono
25-09-2005, 03:41 PM
30 Chapters? Good luck.

Addie
25-09-2005, 04:04 PM
30 Chapters? Good luck.

Thanx :)

Tom H
25-09-2005, 04:38 PM
wow good luck :)

Addie
25-09-2005, 05:09 PM
Thanx VERY much for all your comments.Ill post Chapter 3 tommorow :)

Addie
28-09-2005, 11:21 AM
Chapter 3
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Rebekah and Mikey

’’What?’’ Rebekah said. ‘’I’ve just been outside, he said to ask you out for him, he’s been loving you for weeks!’’ I said. ‘’Well I’m going to get changed and have my breakfast then phone him’’ She said. So when Rebekah phoned him I waited, and waited and waited! She was on the phone an hour! When she finally hung up I said ‘’What was that all about?’’ ‘’I want to bring Mikey to Disneyland’’ she said. ‘’No! You can’t we are taking Chloe and that’s final!’’ I said. ‘’Please April! You’re my sister please please please’’ she cried. ‘’NO! We have took Chloe shopping and we have known her eight years and only known Mikey five!’’ I shouted. Then Rebekah started crying. ‘’Aw come here’’ I said. She came up to me and hugged me. ‘’Look Rebekah, we want to take Chloe ok?’’ I said. ‘’Yes…’’ she cried. ‘’Rebekah, Please don’t cry’’ I said half crying. ‘’I don’t really feel I’m old enough to have a boyfriend’’ she sniffed. ‘’Well, I can tell him that’’ I said. ‘’Thanks’’ ‘’I’m really not well, I might just get my PJS on and go to bed or read a book’’ she said. ‘’Ok then’’ I said hugging her. As she went to read her book in her bed I went outside to see Mikey. As I went down to the park I saw him, and another girl. ‘’That looks like Amber!’’ I thought. I had a closer look. THEY WERE KISSING! I ran home and went up to see Rebekah. ‘’Becka?’’ I said ‘’Yea?’’ she replied. ‘’I saw…Mikey he was kissing Amber…’’ I said quietly. ‘’What?’’ she said and she had tears in her eyes. ‘’Aw Becka!’’ I said. ‘’Look.. I’ll go and give him a piece of my mind!’’ I said. ‘’No’’ she said. ‘’We both will!’’ ‘’Great! Now get dressed they’re down at the park’’ I said. As she got dressed we headed to the park. They were now holding hands. ‘’Okay. Now. I’ll go down and start saying stuff like Hey where’s Rebekah Okay?’’ I said ‘’Yea sure. I’ll wait here.’’ She replied. So I headed down and said to Mikey ‘’Where’s Rebekah?’’ ‘’What you on about?’’ he replied. ‘’You spent an hour telling you love her on the phone and told me you had a crush on her!’’ I shouted. ‘’What!?’’ Amber screamed. She’s one of our friends too. ‘’YOU GO OUT WITH ONE OF MY FRIENDS AND ME?!’’ She screamed. ‘’No I love you, I mean Rebekah. I mean you’’ he mumbled. ‘’Well your dumped by the both of us!’’ she screamed and threw her latte over him. ‘’C’mon April’’ she said. We went up to get Rebekah. She was standing by the wall. ‘’Hey!’’ Amber said. ‘’I can’t believe what that jerk did!’’ Rebekah said. ‘’I know, well I have to go. I have to go to my brothers house’’ she said. ‘’Bye’’ me and Rebekah said.

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