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Yayse
09-10-2005, 02:45 PM
Heh, I just wanted to see what you guys thought.. It's not a lot so far

A rush of cold morning air breathed life into her lungs as she looked over towards the still water. She ran her finger tip lightly across her bottom lip and remembered her first kiss with him, gentle, full of tenderness, full of care. Her heart ached, her eyelids fluttered as she held back angry tears and turned to the sea, unwilling to remember her former love, wanting to forget everything. But as she stood, shivering slightly, alone on the bay and looking out to watch the sunrise, nothing in her mind could stop her wanting him and wanting his touch, to be in his arms and feel safe.
Icy tears fell into the water and were washed away with the gentle waves, it was as though her heart had left her in those tears and she turned back up the bay, no longer caring to witness the beauty of the sunrise. Nothing could bring him back, not even the warmth of day.

Shadowrock!
09-10-2005, 10:52 PM
=] its good x <3

Twenty.one
09-10-2005, 10:55 PM
not bad :)

Bef
09-10-2005, 11:04 PM
Aww abbs its really chillingly good. It made me sad :( Very very well written, i like it.

Reeceykins
10-10-2005, 11:21 AM
Wow, That is really good :)

GoldenGrahams
10-10-2005, 03:36 PM
Very well written + Rep. I hope she gets him back. :(

Yayse
10-10-2005, 06:05 PM
Aww abbs its really chillingly good. It made me sad :( Very very well written, i like it.

awww =] thanks bef <3 and thankies nerd, brad, 21 and.. >< lewis! xD

ChloeDust
10-10-2005, 06:08 PM
Wow abbz, so good so far :P lots of details and i love the way you've written it, it's prouting good xD it's definatly a prouter..<3

Yayse
10-10-2005, 06:17 PM
xD haha why spankyou chloe.. x'] *prouts*

Emicat
10-10-2005, 08:43 PM
Awesome, but that makes me miss my boyfriend even morreeeeeee! >.<;

Yayse
11-10-2005, 04:13 PM
=[ im sorry <3

Emicat
11-10-2005, 05:15 PM
Tis' ok, I haven't seen him for FOUR DAYS!!! Feels like an eternity...

Yayse
14-10-2005, 07:22 PM
awwwh thats so sweet ='] hope u've seen him since when i last posted ><

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