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I cannot help it
Don't question the abilities
The rose will turn black at the sight of your blood
The stench
The stench
You cannot escape
You cannot run
There will always be someone ready
Ready to stop you from the final destination
Forget about aspirations
Hmm.
Yno
That wasnt actually TOO bad.
I like the last 2 lines
Ur signature tho? ..
;l
lol ilu
its not bad..
Its ok average :)
ive seen this guy (the thread starter) around in quite a few threads.,
He makes me lol so much
Well it looks like you didn't put too much effort into this poem, and i'm struggling to fully understand the full meaning of it. I guess it's about someone trying to stop someone from acheiving something or reaching somewhere? It's a rather basic poem, although it's relatively good you could of expressed more of a meaning through the poem and made it longer, but still it's not bad!
5/10
To Improve
- Fully express the meaning of the poem through the lines in which you write
- Spend more time thinking about what to write, use of similies and metaphors etc
- Generally make the poem a little longer and maybe use punctuation more
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Wait just realised you're new... sorry but this poem was made as a joke lol. After a while you learn to work out who's a real poster and who's a troll ^^