New Drum Rhythm (tabbed)

At band practise yesterday my mate Adam unleased this monster of a riff and said "Can you do some drums to that?"
I went "Errrrrrm, ok... I'll try" So I sat down and thought for a min, then I picked up my sticks and played this:


Verse
. |--------------------------------------------------|-------x2-------|
C |X---------------|----------------|----------------|----------------|
S |----------------|----------------|----------------|------------X---|
H |----X---X---X---|X---X---X---X---|X---X---X---X---|X---X---X-------|
S |----o-------o---|----o-------o---|----o-------o---|----o-------o---|
B |o-----o---o----o|o--o--o---o---o-|o-----o---o----o|o--o--o---o---o-|


H |X---X---X---X---|X---X-----------|
t |----------------|------o---------|
S |----o-------o---|----o--oooo-oooo|
F |----------------|-----------o----|
B |o-----o---o----o|o--o--o---o---o-|

Chorus
Cresendo
>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>
________________
| x 8 |
S |oooooooooooooooo|
F |oooooooooooooooo|
B |o---o---o---o---|

What do you think of it?
Leave comments/ratings please :)

cool :o
Im gonna try that out :)

+rep

Lol, ty.
Personally I think it sounds awesome

Lol me too.
I'll be trying it everyday from now on lol.

Lmao, sweet, did you notice any mistakes with it?

none, its awesome ;)

Nice, you been playing drums long?

YOU KNOW WHAT THEY SAY ABOUT DRUMMERS BEING DUMB

No... what do they say?

I'm gonna try that also... ;D *prints off*\


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wow that's awesome. :]