Love

I keep living with my head up in the clouds
Letting in my fears and all my silly doubts
Never letting the notion of love get in
And I just don't know where I should begin
Do I start on my emotional insecurities?
Or should I begin clearing those nasty memories?

I have to find a way to love again
To find a way to being more than friends
And in the corners of my mind I know the truth
I should have never left my life get screwed
But I need a way to learn to love
I need a divine intervention from above
You broke my trust and my soul
Now love just isn't my goal
And I miss it all, without it I'm not whole

I've been walking through the park for days
Wanting to find the words I just can't say
And I keep telling myself all I need is just a little shove
But it's getting harder to believe in love
So I deny myself the right to feel what I really feel
I see love in the negative not believing it's real
But now the time to step up and say
I'm in love and that is okay

And in the end I know the truth
That love will always shine through
And I've finally find how to say what I wanted to say
I promise never to let my fears get in the way
Love is all you really needed
I'm in love, yes indeed.

:eusa_clap That was brilliant!

Aw thanks :)

lack of punctuation at the end of the lines. the quality of the MC was fairly good, although you're not quite up to the standards of jme or skepta as of yet - therefore i must give it a resounding 4/10.

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Originally Posted by Elasticated

lack of punctuation at the end of the lines. the quality of the MC was fairly good, although you're not quite up to the standards of jme or wiley as of yet - therefore i must give it a resounding 4/10.

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Poets lack punctuation full stop (Excuse the pun) lol But I thought it was good :)

7/10 :) have a look through and see if there is anything you can change, off the top of my head there is nothing I can change but I am sure you can :)

I wasn't looking for C&C thanks xD

My poetry isn't pre-planned. I literally type what I think and then post it. Grammar, punctuation etc etc goes out the window, I don't care.

:)

well you're never gonna get a record deal with that attitude.

A record deal?

Huh?

I wasn't looking for one... It's just a poem!

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Originally Posted by Elasticated

well you're never gonna get a record deal with that attitude.

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Lool at that comment :P No offence just made me giggle...

Not had such a big reaction to a poem i've done since Britney's Breakdown!

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