HISTORY ESSAY INIT BRAPP!

It's quite short for an 'essay' - What's the word limit?

Well it was meant to be between 700-1000, and that is just over 1000

Ooo Nazi germany? We're doing local history, crime and punishment.

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Originally Posted by Minstrels

Oh I'm sorry, why do you bother posting your work if you're not capable of taking criticism? If that's the case why don't you hold back until you have a decent finished article, or is that the finished one?

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You criticised his thread title, then gave no CONSTRUCTIVE criticism. I'd be quite annoyed if someone made a post that more or less consists of "piss poor essay." That's just being nasty, not constructive.

Germany very nearly was captured by the communists in the early 20's, the abdication of the Kaiser created the perfect oppertunity. However the Weimar Republic later crushed the communist uprising and communism was never a problem in Germany again until its annexation by the USSR in 1945.

''Within this essay I am going to explore the claims that Hitler did indeed create a totalitarian state, and also explore the reasons why many people believe that Hitler did not have complete power or control, and why he did not have complete control. ''

I would get rid of the 'within this essay I am going to..'

and just put Hitler created a totalitarian state and however many people didnt believe he had complete power or control. This is because (then summarize ur reasons why he didnt)

Then the last bit
and then thats a stronger intro.

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Originally Posted by PriceTags

You criticised his thread title, then gave no CONSTRUCTIVE criticism. I'd be quite annoyed if someone made a post that more or less consists of "piss poor essay." That's just being nasty, not constructive.

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Well it was piss poor, what's the point in wasting my time giving him something constructive when he's rejected constructive criticism at the start of the thread?

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Originally Posted by Minstrels

Well it was piss poor, what's the point in wasting my time giving him something constructive when he's rejected constructive criticism at the start of the thread?

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And your criticism is piss poor, and not constructive, so unless your going to be mature and constructive please refrain from posting.

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Originally Posted by Minstrels

Well it was piss poor, what's the point in wasting my time giving him something constructive when he's rejected constructive criticism at the start of the thread?

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Why waste YOUR time being rude and irrelevant? I would find "piss poor" quite offensive if I showed my History coursework (which takes me a good few hours) to you. I agree his reaction to Garion's post was quite unreasonable, but there is no need to dish out insults for the sake of it. If you said "I don't think it's that good" then posted some reasons why, your post would be more useful. Just saying it's awful is completely unreasonable and pointless! Post us one of your amazing essays so we can throw unreasonable abuse about it please :)