Habbox's New Route

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Originally Posted by Milennia

Oh yeah. We were discussing this sort of thing in school as we have GCSE mocs next week and I told the class about this one and miss read it out to the class haha.

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Wow! Really? What did they say?

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Originally Posted by Muniflex

How i read second one? :O

It good, i have it :)


w0w it really not going good for him :l

More great writing, more +rep if it lets me..

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Thank you :)

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Originally Posted by FlyingJesus

It's nicely written all that, so good from a literary point of view, but a little unrealistic for my liking. Cheaters usually get stick for a while, and the person they cheated with too, but I can't see a whole school turning on someone just for a night of passion :P

On a note more critical of the writing rather than realism of it, I think you've done well to do it in a script style - it gets the point of what's happening across bluntly and eliminates the usual prattle that most stories have and (unfortunately) that more still do badly.

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I think it is quite unrealistic in parts but that's the magic of it I guess. As for cheating, Stacy was very popular and people are scared of her so they're mean to him because she makes them

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Originally Posted by Grig

That was great + rep :)

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Thanks

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Originally Posted by Muniflex

Yeah but the thing is that plays and programmes are alowed to be unrealistic, it's makes it more fun...


EDIT: 1300 posts

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Congrats on the posts!

New One Up Now!

omg poor danny. :'( i could see it coming to that... gah.. i wanna see what stacey thinks of this now, i bet she'll give him loads of crap because she's such a *****.

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Originally Posted by Pyroka

omg poor danny. :'( i could see it coming to that... gah.. i wanna see what stacey thinks of this now, i bet she'll give him loads of crap because she's such a *****.

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Haha, you'll have to wait and see.

New one tomorrow.. last one until Monday!

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Originally Posted by Pyroka

Lost was just silly, it was good at the start and then they wrecked it by making it too unrealistic. These sorts of real-life situations are really good though, and I guess you learn how to deal with them in a sense. Mrs.McCall is guidance yesyes?

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Lost is an example of the unrealistic gone way too far. That show is beyond rediculous. They don't need to write a good show, because the screenwriter's can throw any old crock in the script.

Yeah i wont be reading it but go for it personallt i would like habbo more :P

Grahhh, I want the new edition. :(

McCall, you should really do a WebScript on this, like CADCOMIC has going. It'd be a mint idea... I don't think its ever been done either, but the story is just so enticing. Lost is just silly. They've LOST the plot! LOLOLOLOOOOLOL.

w0w i thought that was great!
I'm really getting into them.

Is there are main reason why they are short? Because i think they should be longer.

Nah the way they're short is good. leaves you on the edge of your seat. ;D

They're short because I originally intended for them to be sent to the people who film things like Kate Modern (as a web short maybe). So I didn't want them too long, also, long scripts run the risk of lacking in quality so I chose quality over quantity!

New One Up Now! https://habbox.com/site//content/view/3551/102/

Wait a minute, I'm confused here.

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Rick’s Mother: I’d just lost my son

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Wasn't it Rick who almost died? Or did die? I thought Rick died in Ep.3 and Danny tried to top himself because of it... Is Rick related to Nate, as brothers? Because I thought it was both Rick & Danny who were caught in bed with eachother? It got me a little confused thats all. Is Nate the one who got caught in bed with Danny, yet was cheating with Stacey who 'didnt provide' what Nate wanted?

I think Stacey's the next one to go off the rails you know, with time she'll realise that she was the one to blame, and I think she could well do something to either herself, or she'll take it to the point of where she takes someone else... Eek. Rick & Danny are gonna be mates through this it seems. As for the twist at the end, which TOTALLY came unexpectedly, is Nate the same Nate who cheated on Stacey & bedded danny? Because I thought Nate died, not moved away...

AGH ALL THE QUESTIONS.