If You Really Knew Me [Poem]

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19-08-2010, 09:10 AM
K-Cat

If You Really Knew Me [Poem]

If you really knew me
you would know
i lost my oldest sister to drugs
If you really knew me
you would know that
i dont get along with my family
If you really knew me
you would know my other
oldest sister moved out and didnt care how i felt
If you really knew me you would know me and my other oldest sister that i look up to hates me and we fight all the time
If you really knew me
you would know ive cut myself and im not proud of it
If you really knew me you would know i really need a friend right now so if you can find it in your heart please message me
19-08-2010, 09:56 AM
Gibs960

It's sort of too simple. Anyone could write

If you really knew me, you'd know my dad abused my brother

That didn't happen in my life but anways. Anyone could of written it :(
19-08-2010, 03:46 PM
K-Cat

Wow that still means you can appreciate it. :l
19-08-2010, 03:48 PM
Dragorn

All your trying to do is make us feel sorry for you in a epically failing way?
19-08-2010, 04:18 PM
Stephen

wait is this like really true about you or something? cos it's a bad idea posting this on here if it is true :l
19-08-2010, 04:20 PM
FlyingJesus

Quote:

Originally Posted by K-Cat

Wow that still means you can appreciate it. :l

True, simple poems can be appreciated, but this doesn't have any poetic style to it, it's just a prose rant and the last line makes it seem like a joke
19-08-2010, 04:24 PM
Gibs960

Quote:

Originally Posted by FlyingJesus

True, simple poems can be appreciated, but this doesn't have any poetic style to it, it's just a prose rant and the last line makes it seem like a joke

"MESSAGE ME AND WE'LL HAVE ESEX ;) LOL"
19-08-2010, 04:43 PM
Robbie

Quote:

Originally Posted by Gibs960

"MESSAGE ME AND WE'LL HAVE ESEX ;) LOL"

*REMOVED*

Edited by Nixt (Assistant General Manager): Please do not be rude toward other members.
19-08-2010, 08:34 PM
buttons

it's not even a poem but welcome to life:S
19-08-2010, 10:53 PM
RedStratocas

no offense but you're always talking about how no one likes you and stuff, its probably no one wants to hang out with the most depressing person on earth :/ try, ya know, cheering up?

and adding spaces between lines doesnt make just anything written into a poem?
20-08-2010, 12:19 AM
Sly

lovely poem, touched my soul
20-08-2010, 06:55 PM
K-Cat

Quote:

Originally Posted by RedStratocas

no offense but you're always talking about how no one likes you and stuff, its probably no one wants to hang out with the most depressing person on earth :/ try, ya know, cheering up?

and adding spaces between lines doesnt make just anything written into a poem?

That's exactly why I'm depressed. This poem was years ago when I just wrote all this.
I don't feel anything close to that right now.

---------- Post added 20-08-2010 at 02:56 PM ----------

I DON'T THINK YOU GUYS UNDERSTAND! THIS POEM WAS JUST STUFF I WROTE YEARS AGO.