London Bus

[Swastika]

off on the london bus
off on up the lane
twisting round the corner
bound to cause incredible pain
just about to relise, that tragic was about to strike
all because some stupid loonatic wanted the driver to fight
they say it was over speed
they say it was over fright
but one thing i relised
was that i wont be alive tonight
swerving round the corner at speeds over nearly one ten
the wheels screeching depressingly, like the sound of an awakening hen
please driver please, dont let me die today
please driver please, dont let me fly away
i no longer relise why god chose that night
i wonder why he choose me, was it because of fright?

Fin!

So what do you all think?

[DiscoPat]

i want to see more of your work.

[Swastika]

Late reply but thanks. ;P

[Misawa]

Hmm, the concept is good but it's a little random and nonsensical if you ask me. Try and work on your spelling.

[Swastika]

Not random at all, i wrote it when that bus with people on crashed on a motorway.

[@xP]

Its fun

[ThisNameWillDo!]

Pretty good

[StainCast]

I get what it's about, but in some places it's a little random.

You need to watch your spelling too in some places.

Well done though!

Jode