[Story] Roses And Tears

[Bradd-Aaron]

They loved each other Jane and Phill. They had a happy life until the Nazi's coudn't stop at WW1 they then went on to WW2. The news was broken to him sadly that in 6 months he would be off to holland to defend the homefront. Jane was devestated. The lovers spent as much time together. They had Walks in the park , picnics. The months sped bye and it came to the sad day were Phil slowly walked to the train station to say farewell and go to holland. On the platform he slowy bent down and asked Jane to marry him.

"Jane will you marry me?" He hoarsed out.
"Oh Phill Yes Yes!" exlaimed Jane.
They hugged and Phil said "Our love will never die I promise you as soon as I get back we will marry and have children. We need to keep strong"
As the train was about to departure they hugged and Jane felt the tears dripping down her pinky cheeks.

She slowly watched the train pull away and burst into tears. Phill chucked a rose he had in his pocket at Jane.

For 6 hole months they thought about each other. Phill army commander grabbed the cadets together and told them that they were to move to another trench up front line were all the fighting was happening. Phill already knows that the frontline is the most dangerous part.

They marched onwards and turned round the corner of the trench and came across a granade about to blow. "Get DOWN!!!" The bomb went off and all the army cadets jumped and scrambled out the way to make sure they were not hit by the rubble.

Phill survived but only just. He thought about Jane and struggled on. Until the 12th of September when a bunch of english army cadets decided they would try storm the enemy trenches. A group of 300 men charged forward. All through the march to the other side he thought about the marriage to Jane.
He shot 2 germans and stumbled on. But then a disater happened. His gun would not fire. He was like the last turkey in the shop for the germans. 2 german cadets rushed foward grabbed Phill and said "Any last words?"
Phil screamed " Im sorry Jane And I love you!"
With that the germans shot him in his arms. It had backfired!

Phill was rushed home to england to recover as he lost he arm. Jane waited by his bedside until at 3:45 Phill said "I love you Jane" With that Phill died of a unknown disease.

At the buryial of Phill Jane Kept a rose that he had gave her before he went. She picked the leaves of slowly and flicked them onto his coffin. She knew thats were he would of wanted them to be.

Thanks /10 I know i have spelling errors.

[Surname]

You were right, there are spelling mistakes...
Overall, I think it's abit un-original. That story has been so many times before in films, tv programmes, books etc. I personally don't like it, sorry
5/10