Year 10'000 - [Story]

[Yazamiinx]

Introduction --

The Earth has passed it’s second Ice Age that began in 2050. The Ice burned out by heating of the planet, a new Earth was formed in 6007. Earth returned to its normal state for Human’s to survive on. From 6007 predictions, fears and sights were foretold that the world would end in year 10’000 at exactly midnight on the 31st of December. No one knows how. Those whom believe it (which is nearly all the Earth’s population) are worried, they may not be alive then, but there descendants will be..

Chapter One
“My eye watched the tides rise…”

The deathly silent air flew around the trees below. A mount was stood beneath a woman’s feet, she could see for miles. The Sun was just setting, it’s colour painting the skies with a blood red colour. No cloud, was in sight. Above her was a darkened navy blue sky, a few stars were see able. The woman breathed in the air, it seemed to have a slight disturbance, a sort of un-easy wind rattling her rib-cages. Behind her was a child, around the age of 6. They were looking at something in the sky.. As if they were waiting for something. The girl tugged on the woman’s sleeve and quietly whispered, “Mother.. Why are we here?”. The woman looked down to see her worried expression, “We are waiting for something” replied the woman, forcing a smile. The girl looked un-easy, “I think we should go!” wailed the girl, grabbing the woman’s hand. “No, we are waiting!” shouted the woman, “WAITING FOR WHAT!?” screamed the girl.

Suddenly, in the corner of the girls eye, an orange light twinkled. At first she thought it was a star, but the light started to get closer, “For this” said the woman, looking down at the girl, smiling.
To the girl’s surprise the light wasn’t travelling towards them, it was travelling to the Earth’s satellite, the Moon. The woman tightened her grip on the girl’s hand and started to breath heavily. The light was travelling faster and faster towards the Moon, the girl clutching the woman’s hand didn’t know whether to run or stay. She didn’t know what would happen, what was that light? Why was it travelling to the Moon? A bad feeling flew across the girl like a wave. A wave she soon would be feeling again.

“Stand back” said the woman, starting to move back behind the tree. The girl was starting to whimper because of the fear she could sense. The woman started to breath harder until it sounded like she was whispering something, “The moon, end, the moon end, tides will rise we will all die I cannot live, not live, I always knew it would end to this, I always knew it would end like this, I can’t die, not NOW!”
The light sparked larger in the sky, it was metres from The Moon, “MOTHER YOU’RE SCARING ME!” screamed the girl, hugging the tree. The woman turned her head and shouted, “WE’RE GOING TO DIE.” the woman’s voice sounded robotic and controlled. Almost scary. Suddenly, the girl screamed horrifically, she pointed her finger into the sky. The woman followed her white bony finger to the direction of The Moon.

Before her, in the sky, the performance of The Moon she had just saw, steady and still, was crumbling to pieces into the dark abyss. A very faint crash was heard from The Earth, from The Moon. Then all was silent. The silence felt un-natural, it wasn’t right, but the woman knew this silence, she knew what it ment.. She knew what symptom it was..
The woman screamed, “NOO!”

The water about a mile away from them threw its blue crystallized self into the air, the woman watched it in horror, wishing it would go back down, but it didn’t it continued to rise higher and higher until it stopped. The water flung itself forward, crashing into the trees, the water was high enough to reach the woman and the girl. The girl was starting to cry hysterically, the woman was breathing fastly. None of them could think, the wave was coming.. It was coming to wipe them out. The woman gripped the tree as the wave got even closer, she looked up at the moon, its crumbling amounts of rock falling slowly, then she looked down. The wave was so close now, it was crashing into the last set of trees in front of them.. And then it would rise.
WOOOSH.
The wave drove up the mount, then sucked back in.. and then up again, building more height up the mount, trying to reach the woman and the girl. The woman couldn’t understand why she wasn’t running, she looked at the girl one more time until she saw the wave rising about 4 metres above them in the girls eyes, the wave stopped again, and then started to fall slowly, this time. The dark shadow was towering over them like a huge building about to collapsed, none of them could think straight, none of them could think to move. There was no where to run, they were helpless, they were going to die.

The woman’s pupils in her eyes expanded as the wave of water dropped with immense speed, the woman let go of the tree and grabbed the girls hand, she started to walk backwards quickly, the wave was drawing nearer to them.. Dropping faster, a sudden stroke of fear swirled in the woman’s heart, her pupils in her cold blue eyes enlarged further as the water of blue slapped down onto their faces, like a block of bricks destroying their beauty, the water filling their bodies they were no longer breathing in..

Crashing back onto her bed, Snow, a woman of such beauty, opened her eyes. Realising her surroundings. The dream she just experienced felt so real. Sweat drenched her body like a blanket of stress, Snow rubbed her face and looked out the window into the sky. The Moon beamed down on her, like it was waiting.. Just waiting..

[Mentor]

Im confused?
The moon being obliterated in itself would cause far more problems than the tide, which would be pretty minimal, The water level would become constant without the moons gravitaion pull, and settle quite calmy somehwere inbetween where the tide would come to when in and when out.

The moons descution thogh, or dicentgration, would not remove the gravitaion pull, since the same amount of matter would be there, and would simply pull itself back together again under its own weight, the diffence would be the force in the direction of what had impacted it, which could massivly shift its orbit and that or earth, even a minor shift could have caoclimic results rangeing from earth itself being flung directly in to the sun or on to a new orbit in which the climate change would eradicate life on earth as its currently known?

Also whats the technological level your supposeing? an ice age would throw as back to a medievil stand point yes, but they had 4000 years to get back to speed, longer than we have had since the dark ages., and it would be conseavable the technolgical advances would have put them ahead of the currant state, insted as it appears from the above to be, behind. Althogh it is quite hard to judge from the lack any non natural events and human reactions so i could be totaly wrong here?

Also what would influence a population to belive the earth would end on a certain date? a descovery made before the socity fell and then left a data remaining althogh the actal cause may have been forgoten? or some sort of religios appertaion "/

Also an event like an ice age's technolgcal throw back would probaly influnce the creation of a new dateing system, new calinder etc "/

[Infrontation]

Im confused?
The moon being obliterated in itself would cause far more problems than the tide, which would be pretty minimal, The water level would become constant without the moons gravitaion pull, and settle quite calmy somehwere inbetween where the tide would come to when in and when out.

The moons descution thogh, or dicentgration, would not remove the gravitaion pull, since the same amount of matter would be there, and would simply pull itself back together again under its own weight, the diffence would be the force in the direction of what had impacted it, which could massivly shift its orbit and that or earth, even a minor shift could have caoclimic results rangeing from earth itself being flung directly in to the sun or on to a new orbit in which the climate change would eradicate life on earth as its currently known?

Also whats the technological level your supposeing? an ice age would throw as back to a medievil stand point yes, but they had 4000 years to get back to speed, longer than we have had since the dark ages., and it would be conseavable the technolgical advances would have put them ahead of the currant state, insted as it appears from the above to be, behind. Althogh it is quite hard to judge from the lack any non natural events and human reactions so i could be totaly wrong here?

Also what would influence a population to belive the earth would end on a certain date? a descovery made before the socity fell and then left a data remaining althogh the actal cause may have been forgoten? or some sort of religios appertaion "/

Also an event like an ice age's technolgcal throw back would probaly influnce the creation of a new dateing system, new calinder etc "/

Rofl your too smart +Rep I'll never write a futuristic story when mentor is around

[Mentor]

Rofl your too smart +Rep I'll never write a futuristic story when mentor is around

Picking holes in movies, esplay sifi like ones is almost a hobby, when people go to the cinima with me, they end up with me complaing about it for hours if not days after, most movies do be getting far more massive complaints, and errors in the laws of phisics, it annoys me when they just ignore things like that and have massive discrepancys in what happens and how stuff works, often vergeing on the rediculus "/

even davinchi code, i mean there supposed to be top symbolgists and a police cryiptogether, i got most the codes instantly they were so bloody obvois, it was painful to read for sometimes near chapters after them, the mirror writeing was by far the obvios, i mean seriosly, you have to be blind (litraly) to not be able to see it "/

[Jasmin]

31st of December.

My birthday lols

[-:Undertaker:-]

Good story +REP

[Infrontation]

Picking holes in movies, esplay sifi like ones is almost a hobby, when people go to the cinima with me, they end up with me complaing about it for hours if not days after, most movies do be getting far more massive complaints, and errors in the laws of phisics, it annoys me when they just ignore things like that and have massive discrepancys in what happens and how stuff works, often vergeing on the rediculus "/

even davinchi code, i mean there supposed to be top symbolgists and a police cryiptogether, i got most the codes instantly they were so bloody obvois, it was painful to read for sometimes near chapters after them, the mirror writeing was by far the obvios, i mean seriosly, you have to be blind (litraly) to not be able to see it "/

I have never read the da vinchi code, I'll maybe just watch it on dvd, although it seems too be one of those things you should read.

[Placeeee]

Cool, Can't wait

[FlyingJesus]

Less words in full caps please, it makes things look rushed not exaggerated, that's the point of an exclamation mark.

In fact it's all pretty rushed.. the destruction of the moon and the following death of millions, all in 7 paragraphs. I'm aware that it's a dream sequence, but still, drag it out, people like description and explanations.

[Yazamiinx]

I'd like to say thank you for the immense critic reviews, I really appreciate user's immensly critisizing my story. It isn't ment to be realistic, it's a Novel (I've already completed it) Its my Novel, I write what I want inside it. It is not rushed, I took a long time on the first chapter, apart from 3 people, over 20 people have read it from my real life, home life and internet 'world' and they seem to really like it.

I didn't say that technology had advanced to its current state. When I put more of the chapters up, you will see that I have based it in a more 'olden' period where the a King reigns ect.

I do not know what is wrong with people on this Forum. It's either, 'OMG SHOW OFF' or 'Your un-realistic story really does not seem to technically show the realistic details to it's actual purpose.' or some of the sheer arrogance on here.


I know a bad review is a good review, but sometimes it annoys me.

Please do not critic my story, I hate critics because they always point out the bad. Thank you.

P.S - Excuse me? "No Caps Lock Please." .. What are you, an arrogant '1337' Internet user?