A sad love

[PigsNose]

My mind is blank
But when my thoughts trail off
To her...
When I hear her voice
And see her face
My heart starts thumping
And then it stops
When I just know
She doesn’t love me back
And all I can do is either
Cry
Or
Be brave

This is the first draft, tell me what you think, thanks

[Browney]

Good, confused at the use of "her" yet you are a girl. Minor detail.

Actually very nice. My favourite poem of yours yet.

[PigsNose]

Thanks and I thought her sounded better than him.

[YoManGo!]

For a depressing one it was good.
But I don't like anything depressing.
Posi or nothing.

[PigsNose]

Thanks

[Browney]

Sorry about an earlier comment saying "I actually like it." It's just i'm quite used to moaning at you for "depressing poems."

[PigsNose]

Uh thanks..
I think

[Browney]

It's a compliment.

[PigsNose]

Oooh okay
How nice you are
;D
I have got another non-depressing poem y'know.

[DiscoPat]

thats a nice one