My first video review, watch it in HD please.
Comments and criticisms would be great.
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Ea8aX-kHt2I

My first video review, watch it in HD please.
Comments and criticisms would be great.
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Ea8aX-kHt2I
- Transitions between sections of the review ('Presentation', 'Multiplayer', 'Final Score' etc.)
- Relevancy to on-screen game footage. Alike when you said "GIANT AXE."
- Better written: no offence but I didn't learn a thing or get your real opinion on why the game is your favourite third-person shooter. I think you need to sort it out. You mention "no cover system" well how about make it into "Transformers is superior to Gears because it doesn't really on you cowering behind walls, it puts you right into the action.", I'm a games reviewer/write in general so I'd gladly help out.
- Multiplayer: don't just skip a component or say 'go elsewhere' not very professional. Don't know if you want professional. Perhaps say 'Multiplayer thoughts at a later date' or link to a multiplayer review (ask the writer if you can use it in the review)
- Funny: I chuckled at "MORE THAN MEETS THE EYE.", just unleash the puns and be more cheery
- Game footage: Never start a review with footage I can see elsewhere, source it all from in-game. Make it open with an epic cutscene, gameplay, gameplay, cut-scene just before review transition
Summary: more structure, written better, game footage and perhaps better audio quality.
Hope I helped.
Well, I never expected it to be THIS bad..- Transitions between sections of the review ('Presentation', 'Multiplayer', 'Final Score' etc.)
- Relevancy to on-screen game footage. Alike when you said "GIANT AXE."
- Better written: no offence but I didn't learn a thing or get your real opinion on why the game is your favourite third-person shooter. I think you need to sort it out. You mention "no cover system" well how about make it into "Transformers is superior to Gears because it doesn't really on you cowering behind walls, it puts you right into the action.", I'm a games reviewer/write in general so I'd gladly help out.
- Multiplayer: don't just skip a component or say 'go elsewhere' not very professional. Don't know if you want professional. Perhaps say 'Multiplayer thoughts at a later date' or link to a multiplayer review (ask the writer if you can use it in the review)
- Funny: I chuckled at "MORE THAN MEETS THE EYE.", just unleash the puns and be more cheery
- Game footage: Never start a review with footage I can see elsewhere, source it all from in-game. Make it open with an epic cutscene, gameplay, gameplay, cut-scene just before review transition
Summary: more structure, written better, game footage and perhaps better audio quality.
Hope I helped.
1. Transitions are coming in the next review (Singularity if you're wondering). This was merely to get a feel for what my audience wants.
2. I agree about the Axe point, another friend mentioned it beforehand.
3. I mentioned right after that having no cover system made the game much more fun. And I mentioned getting up in the enemies face.
4. I didn't review it because I didn't want to. I literally CAN'T. You get it now?
5. I did a roll out pun
6. That is a cutscene at the start. :S
Thanks for the help though, I'll keep it in mind for singularity.
Also, I have a Fez now. Fezs are cool.
(Really I do have. Two of them infact.)
Also, audio quality is out of the question unless you want to buy me a new mic? lol.
Last edited by Niall!; 06-08-2010 at 11:59 PM.
1. GOOD.Well, I never expected it to be THIS bad..
1. Transitions are coming in the next review (Singularity if you're wondering). This was merely to get a feel for what my audience wants.
2. I agree about the Axe point, another friend mentioned it beforehand.
3. I mentioned right after that having no cover system made the game much more fun. And I mentioned getting up in the enemies face.
4. I didn't review it because I didn't want to. I literally CAN'T. You get it now?
5. I did a roll out pun
6. That is a cutscene at the start. :S
Thanks for the help though, I'll keep it in mind for singularity.
Also, I have a Fez now. Fezs are cool.
2. GOOD.
3. You made the comparison to Gears beforehand, would make point stronger to relate it back.
4. Well put it up as "Singleplayer review."
5. TRANSFORMERS. ROBOTS IN DISGUISE.
6. I'm pretty sure that was released as game footage.
It wasn't as bad as I thought it would be. Curse you for having two fezes, good on you for doing Singularity
Don't need to buy a new mic, it's just when you went "axe" the quality dipped a little.
Sounds too much like you're reading from a page. Great review but the words don't flow as much as normal speech.
i agree
Lol oh nail.
If u can get into the beta, try n review BLC ;>
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