So I wrote this song yesterday and I'd love to know what you think of it, be brutal!The lyrics are in the description box if you wana read them.
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So I wrote this song yesterday and I'd love to know what you think of it, be brutal!The lyrics are in the description box if you wana read them.
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Keep your mind open, now my love, or else my heart just might close ♫
its complete crap
haha joking :L but i think with all songs like this, it being in a high tempo some or most of the time is just completely against the mood its trying to create but thats a general opinion.
I think overall it does appeal to the audience (that not being me), keeps a general good flow, is this your first one? and ill show my friend this cos she loves these kinds of songs, ill get an opinion from her :L
btw nice strings. haha perv joke
also did u do any sort of voice editing or is that the real deal?
Yeah I get what your saying with the whole mood of the song thing. Nope I didn't edit my voice, but I did add in some harmonies and stuff after. I think its like the third or fourth song I've written. thanks + reppits complete crap
haha joking :L but i think with all songs like this, it being in a high tempo some or most of the time is just completely against the mood its trying to create but thats a general opinion.
I think overall it does appeal to the audience (that not being me), keeps a general good flow, is this your first one? and ill show my friend this cos she loves these kinds of songs, ill get an opinion from her :L
btw nice strings. haha perv joke
also did u do any sort of voice editing or is that the real deal?![]()
Keep your mind open, now my love, or else my heart just might close ♫
i disagree with the mood-tempo thing cos this isnt really a depressed song its like **** you im done with you and moving on, so i think a slower tempo wouldnt fit well.
i think its a very good song, nice chord structure, and good meaningful lyrics. if i had to pick out one thing to improve id say the pre chorus seems a bit empty so maybe you could extend that with another two lines but it doesnt really stand out and have an impact on the song at all but its just something to consider
really great, keep it up![]()
you can be my daddy
Ahh I know nothing about chord progression and tempo and stuff but I love it, you should be signed or something haha. Your break your heart cover is awesome too, keep it up!
we're smiling but we're close to tears, even after all these years
Its good but your harmonies are a bit off sometimes tbh.
The style of the song reminds me of Taylor swift, the lyrics are very meaningful and I can imagine that alot people could relate to the same issues you talk about in the lyrics.
+ rep I loved it.
Nice guitar![]()
Reminds me of jojo
you'll go far, weldone.
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Thanksi disagree with the mood-tempo thing cos this isnt really a depressed song its like **** you im done with you and moving on, so i think a slower tempo wouldnt fit well.
i think its a very good song, nice chord structure, and good meaningful lyrics. if i had to pick out one thing to improve id say the pre chorus seems a bit empty so maybe you could extend that with another two lines but it doesnt really stand out and have an impact on the song at all but its just something to consider
really great, keep it upYeah now that you mention it I think the pre chorus might be better longer! +rep
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aw thanks
Yeah watching it again they weren't very good at all :L
Thanks, yeah I'll remember to turn them down a bit next time
aw thanks, I love taylor swift! Listening to so much of her music has probably rubbed off a bit haha.![]()
aw thanks Richie![]()
Keep your mind open, now my love, or else my heart just might close ♫
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