short Verse I did [rap/hiphop]

[GoldSolid]

Just a short preview verse for an upcoming song I'm working on, I just wanted a little bit of feed back so far, thanks in advance

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[=Lizzy]

Thats very good so far !

[GoldSolid]

Thanks

[GoldenMerc]

Its pretty good to be fair.
Ross

[bootydrop]

Actually it goes pretty hard. You gotta raise your vocals though, your voice level is sounding soft and the music is somewhat taking over. Put some bass on that, get louder, finish song. And I will put that on a cd and cruise through town bumping it

[FlyingJesus]

I'm not a fan of the accent (nothing personal there are hundreds of rappers who I can't listen to because of the voice ) and like bootydrop says you'd benefit from bringing the vocals up, but you do actually have the core talent which I know is certainly not as simple as people who don't listen to rap seem to think it is. Speed rapping can particularly be a problem because you have to match the syllables in just the right way, but you seem to have that down so good work and good luck!

[GoldSolid]

Thank's alot for the comments guys, very much appreciated

[spamafner]

Very good The music sorta drowns your voice out and have you got some sort of echoing effect? Maybe turn that off or reduce it as a bit as some of your words are very mumbled so it makes it harder to hear. But just a bit of advice, still very good!!

[Shadow-Mason]

Sounds really nice though make sure you take this all the way (I can't help it, but I hate people who promise something and don't keep the promise (and a preview is kind of like a promise)

[GoldSolid]

Don't worry the full one will be up soon enough, just busy writing other things and stuff at the moment though thanks alot for the feedback though, it really does mean alot