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  1. #1

    Default For Someone Special

    This isnt one of the best poems ive ever made, but it was written for someone close to me and someone very special =].



    For someone special

    A poem for you,
    To make you smile,
    If only just,
    For a short while.

    To make you giggle,
    To make you grin,
    To show you ,
    That your amazing.

    A poem to make,
    You laugh out loud,
    Or take away,
    Your darkest cloud.

    To make you happy,
    To make you pleased,
    Id get down on the floor,
    On my knees.

    To make you special,
    Its all true,
    Just to show you,
    That I love you.

  2. #2

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    ;o That's so cool
    Psst. I love you

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    Constructive criticism:
    - Remember that you do not have to use a comma at the end of each line if you're using enjambement (the process when a sentence spreads out over more than one line in a poem). There are some unnecessary commas in there that make the poem seem stilted.
    - Also remember apostrophes in words such as 'it's' (but not possessive) and 'I'd'.

    Otherwise, cute. =)
    Try everything once, even the things you don't think you'll like.

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    Wickid poem.





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    I agree its not your best but i like it, it would be good for someone special


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    Coolness. =)
    blah.

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