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    Default A quick one

    This is one I wrote in about ten minutes, just a quick one. Btw, it is a bit weird...

    Home.
    Screaming and shouts
    Slaps on the face
    Kicks and scratches
    Home.

    School.
    Laughs and points
    Punches in the stomach
    Spits and bites
    School.

    Home.
    Being throwing against
    The cold brick wall
    All I feel is pain
    Home.

    School.
    Being shoved into
    The cracked mirror
    All I feel is pain
    School.

    Home.
    Grabbed by the neck
    Thrown into the shelf
    All my air sucked in at once
    Home.

    School.
    Grabbed by the ankles
    Thrown off the floor
    All my air sucked in at once
    School.

    Running.
    They’re catching me up
    Screaming and shouting
    I can run forever
    Running.

    Caught.
    Grabbed by the shoulders
    Swiveled around
    Kicked in the stomach
    Caught.

    Silence.
    No pain no fear
    Only silence.
    I must’ve died.
    Silence.

    Good bye.
    Good bye all my enemies
    Good bye all my family
    I hated you so much
    Good bye.
    Do you want Pie?

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    It's pretty repeatitive and pretty depressing, only being honest.
    EXTRAVAGANTXO
    "go ahead as you waste your days with thinking, when you fall everyone stands, another day
    and you've had your fill of sinking, with the life held in your hands are shaking cold, these hands
    are meant to hold."

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    Quote Originally Posted by extravagant View Post
    It's pretty repeatitive and pretty depressing, only being honest.
    I'll take your word for it

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    Not goos sorry Not saying i could better ... Cause i can't but sorry

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    *Blubs Into Tissue*
    *Glares* Quit Glaring at me *Glares Harder* I'll Glare back! Yeah you go I'm not scared of you! *Glares* Tickles! ^_^ Your feet are on fire and you're giggling o.o They are? Yup. Who you talking to? Myself

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    I like it, +Rep.


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    Thanks for your comments
    Do you want Pie?

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    Wow, that is so depressing. At least it's a tad unique...

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    Yeah, im sorry but i cant say i like it, its just to depressing. Also, its basiclly just some kid getting beat up for a whole poem, i prefer to watch some kind of ninja getting beaten on. Also it was depressing.

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    See. What did I say about the depressing poems.

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