Her Life [FINISHED!] [Poem]

-=rooty987=- · 18-06-2005, 09:03 AM

I finished it, it is kinda sad, especially the last bit...

Her life was so perfect,
It all fit into place,
She was so happy – so many smiles on her face,
She was beginning to fit in;
With the crowd,
She was starting to feel ever so proud,
She got hooked up with a guy,
She knew he was a prat,
I never understood why she ever did that,
Like a blink of an eye,
She was p*cking her bags – saying goodbye,
She was into his place without consideration,
Her mother cried in pure desperation,
‘Why leave now? Why for that guy?’
Her mother cried – and painfully sighed…
So many tears fell on that day,
She was lost on what to say…

He took her down the highway,
In his brand new ride,
Going faster and faster – from side to side,
He took a sip of cider – and took hold of her hand,
She pulled it away – but he struggled in demand,
Sirens close behind them – getting faster at every touch,
Why did he ever have to drink so much?
She screamed in fear as he pushed the brake,
Why, O why, was this a risk she had to take?
And she cried in fear,
Her end was very near…

As she woke – she heard these words,
‘She’s not going to make it through…’,
‘But please keep fighting – it’s all you can do…’,
And her life was over in a flash,
And there was no way she could ever look back…

Love Dan
xxx

Surname · 18-06-2005, 09:06 AM

Great poem.

10/10
I would give you rep but I will probably need to spread it as I gave you some for the first part of the poem... :p

-=rooty987=- · 18-06-2005, 09:56 AM

hehe, yuh

My mate sed it's sad

~~Lozzoling~~ · 18-06-2005, 10:21 AM

its really good,i'll try give u some rep

Janumz · 18-06-2005, 11:33 AM

O.o I can't be bothered to read it cos I assume it's the same one as you showed me on msn?
It's great.. and it's sad.. and it actually happens ='[..
+Rep if I can (but i probably can't!!)