The last time I posted an article was around november 2007, now that im back, i need to get the hang of using the tools again.
my personal opinion is that its fine.
what do you think about it?
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Thread: Room Review.
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15-04-2008, 05:29 PM #1
Room Review.
Screenwriting Student at the University of Worcester.
23 years old!
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Better grammar would be better, a much more detailed description.
November 2007 isn't so far away.
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You've missed out some small little things;
"The only reason i came across..." Should be a capital I.
"...and to be onest..." x]
"The skeleton poster near the Crypt to low." Should be 'too' and you don't have full depth information, it should be; "The skeleton poster near the Crypt is too low."
Only some minor errors, but it's very nice! :]
There are other errors, but I don't want to sound too picky!No more dreaming of the dead as the death itself was undone
No more crawling like a crow for a boy, for a body in the garden
No more dreaming like a girl so in love, so long
No more dreaming like a girl so in love, so long
Dreaming like a girl so in love with the wrong world.
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yea your grammar is a bit off but nice article.
Now im at the top aint know where to go now, instead of me she gon go down
- Kanye west
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