Poetry

[ScreamingRage01]

Amazing work dude.
tfi don't be so damn rude.

[Misawa]

Thanks.

[tdi]

Thanks.

lol at your ignorance. I see you completely ignored my post there!

[Wootzeh]

doesnt make sense sorry how do you send words as empty calories?

[luce]

Some nice work there i love poetry

doesnt make sense sorry how do you send words as empty calories?

Its a metaphore, i cba to explian but it's very well done

[Misawa]

Thanks.

I don't like to write in a simplistic style, I prefer to use devices such as metaphor to make my literature cryptic and bear a stronger meaning.

[tdi]

Thanks.

I don't like to write in a simplistic style, I prefer to use devices such as metaphor to make my literature cryptic and bear a stronger meaning.

once again you ignore my post!

[Misawa]

I choose to ignore what is not worth my while.

[le harry]

jerry jerry

[FlyingJesus]

It's so looooonelyyyyyyy round the fieeeeelds of Athenryyyyyyy

I tried not to like it but couldn't do so as a poet lol, only problem I have is the repetition of "and" at the start of almost a quarter of the lines. I don't know if that was intended in
And malnourished bodies pack coffin ships
And stumble across the step
And end up in flat green fields
For continuity or flow, which is a nice idea, but when used with "and" it does seem a little childish (refer to how a child talks of a day's events). Other than that, and even in spite of that, a good read.

ps: Australia is rubbish