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  1. 15-10-2010, 03:13 PM #1
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    Hey everyone. this is me "rapping" It is only short. and yes. You may think its rubbish. I am personally proud of it though because I am a begginer. If you hate, please be kind ok?

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    i think youre a bit out of time, and sorry but the line "he's sick, and not in a good way" killed me
    you can be my daddy

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    Needs more flow, so it dont sound like ur readin it off a bit of paper which i presume u are
    Coffee isn't my cup of tea.
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    Quote Originally Posted by Nazi View Post
    Needs more flow, so it dont sound like ur readin it off a bit of paper which i presume u are
    Adding to this, I think it would probably have better flow if any of it was actually rhyming at some point instead of just reading out a prose love letter over a beat
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  5. 15-10-2010, 03:22 PM #5
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    Thanks for your responses as i said im only a beginner. I will improve. thanks though
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