This is exactly my point. So in this case I am supposed to be nice and say a few stupid errors, despite them being pointed out specifically by numerous individuals were still there. How else is one supposed to point these things out? The point wasn't stylistic, heck it wasn't even grammatical, it was a bunch of foolish errors that were still there and I picked one paragraph; I could find another by someone else at the rate this is going. I picked on the manager, because it's kind of unacceptable.
It's a huge shame too, because your article was nicely written Hayden and it's these kinds of things news would need more of !