;o Very good, i liked it but i think the bit where the man came was slightly rushed. Even though if you made it longer into a full story i would buy the book ;]
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Habbo Name : Kaitiey[Thea&Dan]Love youHave a nice valentines day all!
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19-01-2006, 10:12 PM #12
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Yer... Maybe i should make it a bit longer -strokes beard- And thanks for the C+C Lv u all.
And im very patriotic. I
Wales 
The weather does kinda suc though...
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thats really good!!
u will def get a gud mark!!
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25-01-2006, 10:07 PM #14
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scary, made me goosebumply, the man bit was slightly rushed, also add in a bit more suspense, and a better ending , like she eyed something out of the corner of her eye picked up her knife and ran out of the door
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