teenage heartbreak. {:

[A4AOwen]

Very nice.

[Colin-Roberts]

very nice although i think
Here is my final demonstration
should be replaced with
Here is my final demis or however its spelled

[DMB-Hosting]

Wow that's excellent. Good luck mate, it will take something special to beat that.

[summer]

it's pretty good :]

[Mentor]

Thats some good poetry although a few words are repititive.
Plus this line killed it for me{it is actually a poor line especially in comparison to the rest of the poem}

I couldn’t give a damn –
I hear your feet slam.

That just ruined the poem, seemed a bit out of place/as if you were trying hard to think of something to rhyme with it.

True, id have gone with something to do with a door and slam, although my suggestion stops at the rhyming since i suck at the writeings.

Still nice poem, plus as you said kinda emo, but with the context there wasnt really much altenative lol :p