Ok, need a hand.

[piddle2k6]

Yer its a very good piece of work.. Have you recieved your mark back yet? Id be interested to know what you get so please pm it to me

[scubadiva]

The main shark music that is played when we see through the shark’s perspective.

Don't you mean

The main shark music is played when we see through the shark’s perspective. (get rid of the 'that' inbetween 'music' and 'is')?

[Misawa]

Strange. Year 10 at our school did a JAWS essay.

Also, it isn't believed to be Martha's Vineyard - that is exactly where they shot the movie; in it's incredibly shallow waters.

[Antallica]

Very good.. VERY VERY.

[Misawa]

It is good... but as a JAWS obsessive, I can pick it apart more than most. But yeah, for the those who know little about it, ala those within this thread, good job.

[kooldude23]

Well, I have only seen the movie once. I think it is my best essay yet, but only got a C for it -.-

[Concentric2]

Jaws is a movie that is based on the novel written by Peter Brenchley’s best selling novel of the same name.

Doesn't make a whole lot of sense to me... The novel is written by Peter Brenchley's novel?

Do you mean: "Jaws is a movie that is based on Peter Brenchley’s best selling novel of the same name." ?

[kooldude23]

Yeah probably, I dont honestly remember now I wrote this a while ago. Thanks all the same though.