i just reposted so others can get a read of it
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lucyecc/loopy_lu on uk habbo
My current self so you can find me (I don't play much anymore so if my HC runs out etc here I am LOL)
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finally read it all :p
Very good
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An Eclipse came along and did a drive-by, and killed Trixie, Elmer and Sanjay.
In my personal opinion, some of the sentences in thie story are too short with no descriptio. You put that an eclipse came along and killed them, not very descriptive or exciting. There were other examples, but I can't be bothered
It is good - But can be improved. Overall, 8/10 A smile is a curve that sets everything straight
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