Would it be worth my time?

[Xoim]

XOIM FTW!

I think you should try it,
But don't make your books sound like the mainstream books out there!
It's so easily done :]

Good luck :]

[RandomManJay]

I think its better if you choose your own names, makes it more personal it you . How many chapters you up to by the way?

[Mickword]

I'm kind of lazy, tbh I have only written notes, in storey mode like. And I'm going to find my Microsoft Office CD and put it on my comp. Then I'll do the full edit. And I'm going for around 15 chapters for my first book.

[RandomManJay]

I'm kind of lazy, tbh I have only written notes, in storey mode like. And I'm going to find my Microsoft Office CD and put it on my comp. Then I'll do the full edit. And I'm going for around 15 chapters for my first book.

Okie lol .

[Mickword]

here is the opening of the storey:

After the stunning ruins and sparkling lake of the great nation, Drago. Beyond the golden dancing willows, of Nelement. There was just the ever so small nation village of Crayot. The home of Zenu, a simple 16 year old farm boy, no different from nether you or me. Simply dressed in rags, a dirty cloth no less. His hair was a mer mess compared to he passed down clothes, there was no other word for it, brown. Now from his hair to his face, filthy yet saturn blue eyes, beautiful once shown to a simple light.

"Zenu, Zenu my dear" hes graceful mother spoke "its time to awake, it is a lovely day". Now usally nether you or I would wake for this, would we. But, this wasn't any old dad to Zenu, no this was his birthday, his 16th birthday no less. Now there is something that Zenu likes to do, he loves calling his family members different names, insead of there real, long winded names.

"Yes Pip?" he asked to his mother.

"It is time to get up love, it is you first day of work" answered his mother calling from down the stiff, wooden stairs. You could hear Zenu's mutter the word, 'yes'. I know this sounds strange, to be happy to go to work. Even more on your birthday.

Soz about spelling btw, wordpad doesn't have it. lol. .

[Homosexual]

Nice, but work on the grammar a bit

After the stunning ruins and sparkling lake of the great nation, Drago. Beyond the golden dancing willows, of Nelement. There was just the ever so small nation village of Crayot.

Makes no sense to me :-D

[Mickword]

I know, me nether. I never know where to start lol.

[RandomManJay]

It's nice, but some parts make it sound long winded and couple the first couple of sentences don't make and sense.

After the stunning ruins and sparkling lake of the great nation, Drago. Beyond the golden dancing willows, of Nelement. There was just the ever so small nation village of Crayot.

Since I badgered you for a bit of your story, I'll post the prologue of mine, just to make us even . It isn't long so I don't have a problem with posting it.

Just found out the forum doesn't count tabs and spaces at the beginning of a sentence, so you can't really see when a paragraph begins, so I've posted a screenie of it instead:

[Mickword]

Very, very nice!

[Nikki]

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Edit by Sammeth. (Assistant General Manager): Please don't make pointless posts.