A story opener

[Starburst1345]

Punctuality is awful too, have a couple years of english lessons first before writing another story, I suggest. Good luck on your next piece

No way! Doing is learning. The more you write, the more you learn. Write, write, write, write and write some more.

If you don't like reading you can learn from yourself. Read through your work after you finish and experiment with things such as new words and different ways of describing things.

Have fun while doing it! It's YOUR story, you can do whatever you want - If you want to blow up the eiffel tower, then go ahead. If you want to live with Beyonce, go ahead.

Go for it! Try different genres such as horror, romance, sci-fi and so on. Remember, you don't HAVE to show your stories to anyone - they can be your own personal project, so don't be embarassed to go into things like dreary-love scenes (e.g. "I love you so much, Miranda, I want to spend my life with you and never leave you!"). Obviously keep it appropriate.

1 tip

NEVER throw your stories out. No matter how "rubbish" you think they are. (OR ANYONE ELSE for that matter)

[Kyle]

pinoy half of your comments are stupid and I think you need a couple more years of English lessons if you're getting grammar mixed with time keeping.

[Laggings.]

Pinoy, half of your comments are stupid. and I thinkYou need a couple more years of English lessons if you're getting grammar mixed with time keeping.

Yawns.

charlimitz.

A man of many faces


He headed straight out of the room, he grabbed grabbing his C4's gun straight off his desk. He ran down the corridor. and heard a faint voice calling, “Bring that back!” B could hear him, but did not bother to answer, this would waste vital time that was needed to save the hostage. He didn’t have his car keys on him so he had to hot-wire someone else's car. He sped off in the VW Polo and hoped for the best. He slammed his foot down when he saw the petrol light flash on. He had to be there, Schrifmegh was his to finish off. When he arrived, he opened the door and ran. He knew he didn’t have time to close the door. “Where’s the hostage?”, He said to the first police officer he saw. “Top floor, third room on the left, he’s got a gun, don’t mess around.” The words “Don’t mess around” repeated in his mind as he ran up the circular stairs. He heard a faint scream as he reached the top floor. He tried to be as silent as possible, but as he opened the door, he heard a gunshot. “Your gun I do believe,” he said, launching the gun at Agent B. “Straight into his skull. You know I’ve always wanted to meet a secret agent ever since I was a boy.” The word boy did not seem related to this beast of a man. “Why do this? I can hel-,” When he said this, Schrifmegh stood up. “Help me? Me, the one that’s just killed an innocent man. Give me your gun. Or even better drop it on the floor, then we can have a chat.” B did so, with great hesitation. “Now we’ve got that cleared up, I think we can chat. So what do you think my plan is? To kill you right here right now? Ha! No. I will send you back to MI6, let you get a plan, give myself more time to think.” “You’ve had plenty of time to think. Why kill him? He was just a normal man. Nothing distinctive.” “Oh actually there is. He’s one of your agents.” B’s heart sank. “Do you want to give him a hug?” A smirk washed across his face. “You see this thing on my back, it’s called a jet-pack. Catch you later.” He pressed a tiny yellow button and he launched out of the window. B dived onto the floor of the now, dead man. Tears dropped from B’s eyes, as he closed the dead mans eyes.

As B walked out of the room, the dead man in his arms, he thought to himself, "Is this job really worth it? Was it time to leave now? How was he going to retire? Death or old age?"

Yeah and that's putting it lightly.

[ams30]

I think there are some overly critical comments on this piece. It's pretty decent for a 10 year old but does need some improvement.

[Kyle]

Yawns.

charlimitz.




Yeah and that's putting it lightly.

wHy bothar corecting my post it Didn"t even need any correcttion lol you noob

[BobX]

YOU SEE THESE WORDS ON MY SCREEN? IT'S CALLED A SCENTANCE. CYA LATER.

[brandon]

Pretty good effort for someone your age. I doubt half of the people who criticised on this thread could have done a lot better when they were 10.

[FlyingJesus]

To everyone mentioning his age;

That makes absolutely no difference to the content, harsh as that may be

Still as true as when this wasn't an old topic