[Name Undicided]

[YouFail]

This is the prelude to my story which I have not named yet.

I looked around. Blackness. Blackness everywhere I looked. How long had I been out? A couple of hours, days at the most I guessed, but that’s not what I was worrying about. I was worrying about how to get out of here. I couldn’t remember anything, then it all started coming back to me…

[Colourful™]

Very good, but i've spotted a grammar mistake. Instead of writing: "I looked around. Blackness." you could change it to: "I looked around...blackness" or: "I looked around; blackness."

[YouFail]

Ok :) Only writing because message is too short

[jinxii]

It would be inappropriate to use a semi-colon here because the second clause is not adverbial or complementary. It also would not be used in place of a subordinating conjunctive (a conjunction used to link one clause to another if the second clause cannot stand on its own independantly). You could however use the ellipsis (...) or a normal colon. I would personally go with the former.

[Polly-alyssa]

Hm i like it. I wonder what the story will be like.