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Plux
18-03-2008, 08:50 PM
Indie Song - She Loves Me
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[Acoustic guitar intro]

What a state I've been these past two weeks,
A huge adjustment to my life, with many tweaks
It's time like these, I get called a fool,
Sitting in my corner, on my stool.


[Chorus]
But what do I know'
I know she loves me,
yeah she loves me,
through my stupidity
I know she loves me!


[V2]

Yet i'm out again, leaving her at home.
Left her thinking, when in Rome.
I fall through the door, back at three,
Now I'm climbing up her anger tree!

[Chorus]
But what do I know'
I know she loves me,
yeah she loves me,
through my stupidity
I know she loves me!

[V3]

I Know, I know, i've been a fool, an idiot.
But babe, just wait a sec.
Feel some sympathy, I'm a nervous wreck.
Just gimme' another chance I can change,
Go to a whole new level, a whole different range.

[Chorus]
But what do I know'
I know she loves me,
yeah she loves me,
through my stupidity
I know she loves me!

Oh yeah she loves, me.
I know she loves me.
But I can't do this no more.
Through my stupidity I know she loves me.


Written by Josh Evans :D

Misawa
19-03-2008, 02:26 PM
Some of the language is a little clumsily put together, but cool.

Plux
21-03-2008, 01:58 PM
Some of the language is a little clumsily put together, but cool.


Hahah, I was planning for that form of style, but I can see it is kind of,
eegh. xD

Thanks :)

RedStratocas
21-03-2008, 02:46 PM
heh, sounds kinda like pavement. pretty sweet

Plux
21-03-2008, 07:50 PM
;D Glad to see people like it.

-Eyeless-
25-03-2008, 06:22 PM
Some of the things like the bit about a stool really seem odd but other than that quite nice, would be good if you could post a video or soundbite of it being played on guitar... but its fine if you cant :D Keep on writing!

Plux
25-03-2008, 07:32 PM
Some of the things like the bit about a stool really seem odd but other than that quite nice, would be good if you could post a video or soundbite of it being played on guitar... but its fine if you cant :D Keep on writing!

Hahah thanks, I'll try and get my mate to record it.

xander
25-03-2008, 07:55 PM
verse 3 is the better verse by far, however it just seems as if you've tried rhyming words with random words(like 'stool' for instance) just so it rhymes. sounds a bit like 'scouting for girls' in my opinion, a bit too much like them.

Insedated
25-03-2008, 08:19 PM
verse 3 is the better verse by far, however it just seems as if you've tried rhyming words with random words(like 'stool' for instance) just so it rhymes. sounds a bit like 'scouting for girls' in my opinion, a bit too much like them.

Scouting for girls? A band?

Plux
26-03-2008, 02:19 PM
Thanks for the comments.

scott
26-03-2008, 07:25 PM
Some of the things in it are weird, but it sounds good :D

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