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    Default 3rd ever song. [Indie]

    Indie Song - She Loves Me
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    [Acoustic guitar intro]

    What a state I've been these past two weeks,
    A huge adjustment to my life, with many tweaks
    It's time like these, I get called a fool,
    Sitting in my corner, on my stool.


    [Chorus]
    But what do I know'
    I know she loves me,
    yeah she loves me,
    through my stupidity
    I know she loves me!


    [V2]

    Yet i'm out again, leaving her at home.
    Left her thinking, when in Rome.
    I fall through the door, back at three,
    Now I'm climbing up her anger tree!

    [Chorus]
    But what do I know'
    I know she loves me,
    yeah she loves me,
    through my stupidity
    I know she loves me!

    [V3]

    I Know, I know, i've been a fool, an idiot.
    But babe, just wait a sec.
    Feel some sympathy, I'm a nervous wreck.
    Just gimme' another chance I can change,
    Go to a whole new level, a whole different range.

    [Chorus]
    But what do I know'
    I know she loves me,
    yeah she loves me,
    through my stupidity
    I know she loves me!

    Oh yeah she loves, me.
    I know she loves me.
    But I can't do this no more.
    Through my stupidity I know she loves me.


    Written by Josh Evans

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    Some of the language is a little clumsily put together, but cool.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Misawa View Post
    Some of the language is a little clumsily put together, but cool.

    Hahah, I was planning for that form of style, but I can see it is kind of,
    eegh.

    Thanks

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    heh, sounds kinda like pavement. pretty sweet

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    ;D Glad to see people like it.

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    Some of the things like the bit about a stool really seem odd but other than that quite nice, would be good if you could post a video or soundbite of it being played on guitar... but its fine if you cant Keep on writing!

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    Quote Originally Posted by !.:Creature:.! View Post
    Some of the things like the bit about a stool really seem odd but other than that quite nice, would be good if you could post a video or soundbite of it being played on guitar... but its fine if you cant Keep on writing!
    Hahah thanks, I'll try and get my mate to record it.

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    verse 3 is the better verse by far, however it just seems as if you've tried rhyming words with random words(like 'stool' for instance) just so it rhymes. sounds a bit like 'scouting for girls' in my opinion, a bit too much like them.
    Craig

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    Quote Originally Posted by xander View Post
    verse 3 is the better verse by far, however it just seems as if you've tried rhyming words with random words(like 'stool' for instance) just so it rhymes. sounds a bit like 'scouting for girls' in my opinion, a bit too much like them.
    Scouting for girls? A band?

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    Thanks for the comments.

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