[Cruel World]

[Jinxxed]

Does the world really care,
If it's not as nice as a funfair?
It may not be as sweet as honey,
Nor may it give out free money,
But I'll tell you one thing today,
The world will always get it's own way...

It dished up those Tsunami flows,
And took all those lives - that's how it goes,
We've all felt the world make us sad,
Thinking we don't deserve what we've had,
Well I'll tell you, you shouldn't weep,
And make the waters of the Earth run ever deep...

The world is not really nice,
Not a sphere, a deadly device,
And I think one day you'll find,
Something will destroy all mankind,
The land on the Earth will erode,
And the dying sun will explode...

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Took me 15 minute and it's a bit rubbish, but oh well, rate anyway :)

[jinxii]

Don't use forced rhyming.

Some lines good and emotive though, despite bloody FR.

Subject matter cliched. 7/10

[-x-Kerrianne-x-]

7/10
Forced Rhyming doesnt really give a good effect but a good poem in general.

[Jinxxed]

Ok so no more FR ;)