[+REP] Feedback Needed!

[Judas]

heeeeey

this is the instrumental for a new song i'm working on

before i record it i want to improve this, as i think there is always room for improvement, so i would love if if you all could give constructive criticism and general feedback to help me.

if it's just not a style of music you enjoy and you have nothing decent to offer please just don't reply


http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=YvuRuQpHfv4

PLEASE ignore the horrible 'harry b' watermark thing, that's just me being scared that someone, for some reason, decides to steal it, god knows why they would but you can never be too careful :P

[Becca]

omg this is amazing, eargasm
+reppp

[Judas]

aw thank you froobyyyy +rep

[lawrawrrr]

I really like this, and it'll sound a lot better once it's actually recorded. My breakdown...

First section - Love the chord progressions, but plain chords can be a bit chuggy (will probably sound better once the vocals are over the top)
Next bit - HEAVY BASS LINES FTW (i so have my subwoofer out, pouding out the house ;)). It's really good!
@ 2.00, the link is a bit fuzzy, I like the idea of almost stopping but it sort of goes "pwffhh" if you get what I mean LOL
@ 3.00, the transition between sections doesn't seem as fluent as the other ones at all, but I like the little returning of the original theme, gives it a 'cyclic nature' (you can tell I'm a music student right? LOL)

Overall, I really like this, and even though it's not really my style, it's the sort of thing I could get into! What program did you use to write it? +rep :)

[Judas]

I really like this, and it'll sound a lot better once it's actually recorded. My breakdown...

First section - Love the chord progressions, but plain chords can be a bit chuggy (will probably sound better once the vocals are over the top)
Next bit - HEAVY BASS LINES FTW (i so have my subwoofer out, pouding out the house ;)). It's really good!
@ 2.00, the link is a bit fuzzy, I like the idea of almost stopping but it sort of goes "pwffhh" if you get what I mean LOL
@ 3.00, the transition between sections doesn't seem as fluent as the other ones at all, but I like the little returning of the original theme, gives it a 'cyclic nature' (you can tell I'm a music student right? LOL)

Overall, I really like this, and even though it's not really my style, it's the sort of thing I could get into! What program did you use to write it? +rep :)

such an amazinggg response thank you +rep

i don't really know what you mean by pwfffhh :( is there any way you could possibly describe it differently?

and yes i was hoping someone would pick up on that just to check i'm not the only one that thinks that. i'm trying to work on the changing of the section so thank you :) does anybody have any suggestions on how i can do this so it doesn't sound so sudden?

well i wrote it on piano initially then i used fl studio and most of the instruments are different vsts i downloaded from around the internet. some people say fl studio is just a program for amateurs or whatever but thats all i am and i can make things like this that i am proud of so i'm not bothered.

[Judas]

FOR EXTRA LOVE

i thought i may as well upload this other one that's in the works. same situation as i explained in the first post, so your thoughts would be wonderful


http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=0AxiKL__Kco

[Becca]

the second one is like a pacman rave
loveee it

[Judas]

LOL thnx xoxoxo

[Con]

awomg love the 8bit one sounds like pacman, space invaders and mario lmaoo infact, have you sampled the noises of super mario bros? :P
Some nice stuff here can't wait to hear how these progress :)

[Zuth]

Love it! Well done :P

[Judas]

awomg love the 8bit one sounds like pacman, space invaders and mario lmaoo infact, have you sampled the noises of super mario bros? :P
Some nice stuff here can't wait to hear how these progress :)

hehehe yes i did ;) thank you :) xxx


Love it! Well done :P

thank you :D

[lawrawrrr]

such an amazinggg response thank you +rep

i don't really know what you mean by pwfffhh :( is there any way you could possibly describe it differently?

and yes i was hoping someone would pick up on that just to check i'm not the only one that thinks that. i'm trying to work on the changing of the section so thank you :) does anybody have any suggestions on how i can do this so it doesn't sound so sudden?

well i wrote it on piano initially then i used fl studio and most of the instruments are different vsts i downloaded from around the internet. some people say fl studio is just a program for amateurs or whatever but thats all i am and i can make things like this that i am proud of so i'm not bothered.
Now I'm back I shall continue my in-depth analysis............

There's nothing wrong with amateur programs, I love them, like, my friend runs a successful comic blog site and she uses MS Paint so there ya go!

Okay well if you listen to it, it sounds like the repeated note is going to happen again, but there's a sort of muffled sound over the top... i'm terrible at describing things XDXD

Right... ideas for link
As I said this isn't my type of music buttt how about the underneath rising melody comes in over the rave-y bit while the rave bit fades out? It also doesn't seem balanced, as the last part is a lot shorter. Only tiny things though - I'm a perfectionist obsessed with symmetry so yeah... XD

SOUNDING AMAZING XO


8BIT PIECE:

This reminds me of that scene in the original Tron, lovinggg the game influences!! Can't really see anything wrong, apart from the link - I KNOW they're difficult to write... how about a reverse cannon effect (if you can/know what I mean at all)

OOoooooohhhh I really like these. Like, a LOT.

[Judas]

Okay well if you listen to it, it sounds like the repeated note is going to happen again, but there's a sort of muffled sound over the top... i'm terrible at describing things XDXD

I'm still not exactly sure what you meann :( do you mean the echo between where the sections change? cos if not i'm really puzzled here :P it could just be youtube cos the sound quality is worse


As I said this isn't my type of music buttt how about the underneath rising melody comes in over the rave-y bit while the rave bit fades out? It also doesn't seem balanced, as the last part is a lot shorter. Only tiny things though - I'm a perfectionist obsessed with symmetry so yeah... XD

The only problem with that is I produced the two different parts separately, and the piano end part is a completely different tempo to the main part so if I put them together it would just be out of time ;( and hopefully the last part wont sound as unbalanced when i record the vocals, because right now i'm planning for that whole part to have vocals over it. but when i do come to record it i will definitely try that out and see how it sounds :)


8BIT PIECE:

This reminds me of that scene in the original Tron, lovinggg the game influences!! Can't really see anything wrong, apart from the link - I KNOW they're difficult to write... how about a reverse cannon effect (if you can/know what I mean at all)

OOoooooohhhh I really like these. Like, a LOT.

when you talk about the link here i presume you're talking about the door still and not 8 bit? otherwise what link do you mean :P

awww i love you you're so wonderful

[lawrawrrr]

I'm still not exactly sure what you meann :( do you mean the echo between where the sections change? cos if not i'm really puzzled here :P it could just be youtube cos the sound quality is worse
meh it's not even major dw XD



The only problem with that is I produced the two different parts separately, and the piano end part is a completely different tempo to the main part so if I put them together it would just be out of time ;( and hopefully the last part wont sound as unbalanced when i record the vocals, because right now i'm planning for that whole part to have vocals over it. but when i do come to record it i will definitely try that out and see how it sounds :)
Probably - you can;t really judge till it's all finished, when are you recordinggg?



when you talk about the link here i presume you're talking about the door still and not 8 bit? otherwise what link do you mean :P
8 bit at... 2.24



awww i love you you're so wonderful
:$:$ :loveyou:

[Judas]

OHHH okay i know exactly what you mean, i'm gonna work on that thanks

and i'm not sure when to record :P i made the 8 bit instrumental first time about 3 months ago and the door a few weeks ago and just been making small changes every now and then to both of them since :)

[lawrawrrr]

OHHH okay i know exactly what you mean, i'm gonna work on that thanks

and i'm not sure when to record :P i made the 8 bit instrumental first time about 3 months ago and the door a few weeks ago and just been making small changes every now and then to both of them since :)

ehehehe i know what you mean ,took me 4 mo to get my AS composition recorded XD

[Judas]

i just finished a piece for gcse that took me 4 months too ;l

[wiktoria]

I love the first one but you do need to work on the changing of the sections. Other than that I think it's really good.
OMG I SERIOUSLY LOVE THE SECOND ONE AHHHH it's like a mix between pacman and space invaders (duhh wiki lol) +rep

[Jessicrawrr]

The first ones nice, it's a bit dull on the first section, I like it when it livens up.
The second ones like the others said, pacman and mario :D
Nice work :)

[Judas]

I love the first one but you do need to work on the changing of the sections. Other than that I think it's really good.
OMG I SERIOUSLY LOVE THE SECOND ONE AHHHH it's like a mix between pacman and space invaders (duhh wiki lol) +rep

thank you so much ehehe :D hopefully i will fix the changeover soon and i'll post it when i'm done thank youuuu


The first ones nice, it's a bit dull on the first section, I like it when it livens up.
The second ones like the others said, pacman and mario :D
Nice work :)

hopefully it will be better with the singing over the top, but thank you so much :D

you know it's interesting all the people i've shown them to have different opinions, some prefer the first and some prefer the second it's like really mixed which is great :)

[Jessicrawrr]

I look forward to hearing with singing on top :)

[Judas]

i feel pressured now haha

[Judas]

If anyone else wants to weigh in before I go back to the songs tonight (I hope) that would be awesomeee :)

[Eoin247]

Sounds great mate :)

I particularly like the 8bit sounding one, i'm not to sure why i suppose it reminds me of good old retro gaming.

[Richie]

Very nice, what program are you currently using?

[Judas]

Sounds great mate :)

I particularly like the 8bit sounding one, i'm not to sure why i suppose it reminds me of good old retro gaming.

thanks :) yeah that was the plan haha :P


Very nice, what program are you currently using?


well i wrote it on piano initially then i used fl studio 9 and most of the instruments are different vsts i downloaded from around the internet. some people say fl studio is just a program for amateurs or whatever but thats all i am and i can make things like this that i am proud of so i'm not bothered.

:D thanks a lot x

[.Shaun,,]

There sounding good! :)

[Judas]

thanks :)

[JACKTARD]

I really like it :) nice work!

[Judas]

thank you very muchh :)

[myke]

Wow, it's really good :D...

Only thing is, the beginning sounds like another song, I don't know what song it is though... probably just me being stupid lol blehh.

The rest of it is awesome, would be cool to see it finished.

[lawrawrrr]

Wow, it's really good :D...

Only thing is, the beginning sounds like another song, I don't know what song it is though... blehh.

The rest of it is awesome, would be cool to see it finished.


coff coff nice sig ;);););););););););););););););)

O/T - yeahhhh, would be pretty cool, set a date for recording? *impatience LOL*

[Judas]

Wow, it's really good :D...

Only thing is, the beginning sounds like another song, I don't know what song it is though... probably just me being stupid lol blehh.

The rest of it is awesome, would be cool to see it finished.

omggg i better not have ripped someone off by accident lmao :( but thank you :D


O/T - yeahhhh, would be pretty cool, set a date for recording? *impatience LOL*

lol i'm trying to get it as perfect as i can, you will be the first to know bbygurl ox

[lawrawrrr]

lol i'm trying to get it as perfect as i can, you will be the first to know bbygurl ox

bbygurl :$:$:$:$:$:$
yay i look frward to it sexay :)

[Matthew]

Very nice!

I'm trying to learn to use FL studio atm, made a very basic 'song', but thats as a far as I've got at the moment...

+rep :)

[Judas]

aww well it takes a while to find your way around it and stuff but once you get a bit of experience it just comes together, it's a good program :) that's one of the things i love about music, there is ALWAYS more you can discover and learn and use to improve your songs :) +rep

[:.justben.:]

i like it ;)

[Judas]

thnx for that

recorded 1 of them now ;)

[Hushy]

I think it sounds amazing, its exactly my type of music and would be the sort of thing i downloaded from itunes etcc

+rep for the awesome tune :)

[Judas]

thats so kind thank you :)